TheGraduate wrote:So, is it okay to write it the following way?
More than three times as many independent institutions of higher education charge tuition and fees of under $8,000 a year as those charge over $16,000.
i.e. by replacing the second instance of "independent institutions of higher education" with "those".
The revision above is not viable.
When
those serves as the subject of the second clause in a comparison, it must be followed by a MODIFIER -- one whose purpose is to REPLACE A MODIFIER attached to the subject of the first clause.
The girls in this year's class are taller than those in last year's class.
Here, the red modifier after
those (
in last year's class) serves to replace the blue modifier attached to the subject of the first clause (
in this year's class).
OA:
More than three times as many independent institutions of higher education charge tuition and fees of under $8,000 a year as charge over $16,000.
Here, the modifier in blue applies to BOTH CLAUSES.
Since this modifier does NOT need to be replaced in the second clause by a new modifier, the use of
those in the second clause is unwarranted.
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