Hi Everybody,
Here's the draft I got for Duke's MMS program. Please help me improve my essay. Thank you guys!
Essay question : Why are you pursuing MMS at this stage? (250 words)
My Response :
My interest in pursuing MMS degree at Fuqua comes from two factors. First is from my father who is a doctor and also a businessman in the healthcare industry. His stories about his successes in the healthcare business motivated my interest in the healthcare industry. Second is from my experience of growing up in Myanmar. Under the rulership of the military for decades, Myanmar has struggled to provide a quality healthcare system for its citizens. There are numerous incidents in which the victims did not survive because the emergency care did not arrive in time. During the country’s transformation process, I wish to be able to contribute by creating efficient and effective healthcare programs.
After finishing my undergraduate studies in biology, I realize that I need to pursue a management education to improve my understanding of the fundamentals of management and business. I believe the MMS program at Fuqua will help me develop as a leader by improving my public speaking skills, negotiating skills and strategic planning skills. Furthermore, I feel that the diverse community of MMS program will provide me with unvaluable experience and skills necessary to deal with foregin investors and customers in the future.
With the knowledge and skills developed from the MMS program, I hope to grow as a professional in a healthcare management consulting firm and build up my understanding of the industry. Eventually, I hope to utilize my experience and knowledge in helping Myanmar creating a quality healthcare system for its citizens.
Here's the draft I got for Duke's MMS program. Please help me improve my essay. Thank you guys!
Essay question : Why are you pursuing MMS at this stage? (250 words)
My Response :
My interest in pursuing MMS degree at Fuqua comes from two factors. First is from my father who is a doctor and also a businessman in the healthcare industry. His stories about his successes in the healthcare business motivated my interest in the healthcare industry. Second is from my experience of growing up in Myanmar. Under the rulership of the military for decades, Myanmar has struggled to provide a quality healthcare system for its citizens. There are numerous incidents in which the victims did not survive because the emergency care did not arrive in time. During the country’s transformation process, I wish to be able to contribute by creating efficient and effective healthcare programs.
After finishing my undergraduate studies in biology, I realize that I need to pursue a management education to improve my understanding of the fundamentals of management and business. I believe the MMS program at Fuqua will help me develop as a leader by improving my public speaking skills, negotiating skills and strategic planning skills. Furthermore, I feel that the diverse community of MMS program will provide me with unvaluable experience and skills necessary to deal with foregin investors and customers in the future.
With the knowledge and skills developed from the MMS program, I hope to grow as a professional in a healthcare management consulting firm and build up my understanding of the industry. Eventually, I hope to utilize my experience and knowledge in helping Myanmar creating a quality healthcare system for its citizens.
