Doubt over words indicating parallelism

saurabh2525_gupta wrote:I am doubtful over the use of parallelism indicating words in the sentences. For example, where to repeat words like WILL and where to not.
Like in the example:-

The joint business venture will increaseemployee satisfaction and [will] start improving the relations between upper management and staff. --------> Notice the will in green is ellipsis and if the same is put then it causes unparallelism

The corrected sentence is:-

The joint business venture will increase employee satisfaction and [will] improve relations between upper management and staff.----------> proper parallelism is being maintained i.e will increase x and will improve y. Second, will is a part of ellipsis i.e which is not necessary to be put in a sentence if the same has been introduced in former part of the sentence.

Hope I am clear !!!!!

Thanks in advance,
JOHN

saurabh2525_gupta wrote:Hi aspirant2011,

Thank you for replying.

What is the rule that determines that the second WILL is optional? ( That is the center of the confusion)

Rule is Ellipsis i.e in order to maintain conciseness in a sentence repeated words should be avoided wherever required.

Also, what will you suggest for the sentence

The works displayed in the photography exhibition were contributed by numerous artists, both those who already had mass appeal and [those] who never had much exposure.

If you see above those had been used earlier in the sentence so the second those wasn't necessary,therefore, it was hidden but was self explantory that it was refering to artists who never had much experience. It maintained parallelism by both those x and [those] y

Can you please give the references of the articles where these rules and discussed/mentioned.

I don't remember the links for the references but you can search of BTG, it will be there

Thanks,
JOHN

saurabh2525_gupta wrote:You are right mundasingh but this is one thing that is pricking me all the while.... So please help me..... PLEASE...

Also, what will you suggest for the sentence

The works displayed in the photography exhibition were contributed by numerous artists, both those who already had mass appeal and those who never had much exposure.

bubbliiiiiiii wrote:I agree with what aspirant 2011 has said about parallelism.

However, it I had an option as written below, I would have choosen this one.

Also, what will you suggest for the sentence

The works displayed in the photography exhibition were contributed by numerous artists, both those who already had mass appeal and those who never had much exposure.

Here, Both X and Y is an idiom and to make X and Y parallel, both must start with those.

Please correct if I am wrong.

mundasingh123 wrote:

saurabh2525_gupta wrote:You are right mundasingh but this is one thing that is pricking me all the while.... So please help me..... PLEASE...

Do You have the MGMAT SC Guide . If You do , refer to the first page of the Comparisons chapter in the advanced section .Its the last chapter . You will understand when is the repetition necessary and when its not .

bubbliiiiiiii wrote:I agree with what aspirant 2011 has said about parallelism.

However, it I had an option as written below, I would have choosen this one.

Also, what will you suggest for the sentence

The works displayed in the photography exhibition were contributed by numerous artists, both those who already had mass appeal and those who never had much exposure.

Here, Both X and Y is an idiom and to make X and Y parallel, both must start with those.

Please correct if I am wrong.