credit card payment

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credit card payment

by spring_bustle » Sun Oct 18, 2009 7:54 am
Hi All,

Please tell me if the below sentence is correct.

Credit Card payment can be done after 24 hours of a beneficiary customer being added.

If incorrect , please give me the correct one.

Spring

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by Gaurav Yadav » Sun Oct 18, 2009 9:11 am
I think the rule here is 'Keep It Simple & Sweet'.

Credit card payment can be done after 24 hours of adding a beneficiary customer.

I don't feel any need of 'being' here.

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by spring_bustle » Sun Oct 18, 2009 6:11 pm
Hi,

I found the original sentence in netbanking of a famous bank !

Any other answers ?

Spring