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Bluegrass musician Bill Monroe, whose repertory, views on musical collaboration, and vocal style were influential on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from his own.

(A) were influential on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from

(B) influenced generations of bluegrass artists, also inspired many musicians, including Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from

(C) was influential to generations of bluegrass artists, was also inspirational to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music was different significantly in comparison to

(D) was influential to generations of bluegrass artists, also inspired many musicians, who included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, the music of whom differed significantly when compared to

(E) were an influence on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, including Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music was significantly different from that of

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by sameerballani » Fri Jul 01, 2011 7:10 am
imo B
eliminate mostly on wordiness.
aspirant2011 wrote:Bluegrass musician Bill Monroe, whose repertory, views on musical collaboration, and vocal style were influential on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from his own.

(A) were influential on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from

(B) influenced generations of bluegrass artists, also inspired many musicians, including Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from

(C) was influential to generations of bluegrass artists, was also inspirational to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music was different significantly in comparison to

(D) was influential to generations of bluegrass artists, also inspired many musicians, who included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, the music of whom differed significantly when compared to

(E) were an influence on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, including Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music was significantly different from that of

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by Frankenstein » Fri Jul 01, 2011 7:19 am
Hi,
was is incorrect because the subject is plural. So, C and D are out.
'comam+that' is wrong. Hence, A is out.
different from that of his own means different from the music of his own music. redundant.
There can be more issues.
Hence, B
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by aspirant2011 » Fri Jul 01, 2011 7:26 am
Frankenstein wrote:Hi,
was is incorrect because the subject is plural. So, C and D are out.
'comam+that' is wrong. Hence, A is out.
different from that of his own means different from the music of his own music. redundant.
There can be more issues.
Hence, B
my doubt was that of part only in E and you cleared it, thanks a lot :-)

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by Frankenstein » Fri Jul 01, 2011 7:32 am
aspirant2011 wrote: my doubt was that of part only in E and you cleared it, thanks a lot :-)
Hi,
No probs. When such long sentences are there, it is hard to check for each and every mistake and explain. So, if you have specific issue, it is always good to raise it so that we can discuss on that specific issue in greater detail.
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