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by nafiul9090 » Sat Sep 03, 2011 9:28 am
During the industrial revolution, most of the government stimulus money was spent on mining industrial metals that were needed to build heavy machinery and on building the infrastructure needed to carry large pieces of machinery across the country.

a)mining industrial metals that were needed to build heavy machinery and on building the infrastructure needed to carry
b)mining industrial metals that were needed to build heavy machinery and when they built the infrastructure needed to carry
c)mining industrial metals that were needed to build heavy machinery as well as on building of the infrastructure needed to carry
d)the need to build heavy machinery that required mining of industrial metals and the building of infrastructure that was needed for carrying
e)mining industrial metals that were needed for building of heavy machinery and on building the infrastructure that was needed for carrying of


oa is A
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by GmatKiss » Sat Sep 03, 2011 9:33 am
nafiul9090 wrote:During the industrial revolution, most of the government stimulus money was spent on mining industrial metals that were needed to build heavy machinery and on building the infrastructure needed to carry large pieces of machinery across the country.

a)mining industrial metals that were needed to build heavy machinery and on building the infrastructure needed to carry
b)mining industrial metals that were needed to build heavy machinery and when they built the infrastructure needed to carry
c)mining industrial metals that were needed to build heavy machinery as well as on building of the infrastructure needed to carry
d)the need to build heavy machinery that required mining of industrial metals and the building of infrastructure that was needed for carrying
e)mining industrial metals that were needed for building of heavy machinery and on building the infrastructure that was needed for carrying of


oa is A
IMO: A. I see no problem with the sentence , it is parallel and concise.
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by sungoal » Sat Sep 03, 2011 9:38 am
option B is wrong as it is a sentence fragment because there is no independent clause after the dependent clause "when they built the infrastructure....."

option C is wrong because the gerund phrase "building of the infrastructure" is awkward and wordier. Option A correctly uses "building infrastructure" which is more concise.

option D again uses the awkward gerund phrase "building of the infrastructure".

option E is also wrong because of the usage of awkward gerund phrases "building of heavy machinery" and "building the infrastructure"
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by nafiul9090 » Sat Sep 03, 2011 9:55 am
i am a bit confused in option e.....whats wrong in Option E?
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by sungoal » Sat Sep 03, 2011 10:07 am
E is wordier construction. "building of the machinery" can be changed to "building machinery" already present in option A

"building of the infrastructure" can be changed to concise phrase "building infrastructure"

"carrying of large pieces" can be changed to "to carry large pieces" .

So due to the usage of these wordier gerund phrase, E is incorrect.
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by sl750 » Sat Sep 03, 2011 10:38 am
Option A is correct
A maintains correct parallelism

Money was spent on x and on y
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