The author cites that a study os high school shows that the percentage of students who graduate on time is higher for private schools than for public schools.The author concludes that the parents who want their children to graduate from high school on time should send them to private school. On the first sight this seens to be the obvious solution but on a closer look, the author's argument is not only flawed but also unconvincing as it stands.
First of all, the author cites that a study of high school shows that the percentage of students who graduate on time is higher for private schools than for public schools. But the author has not provided any information of how the study was carried out, who were the respondants, what was the duration of the study that is whether the study was carried out for 1 or 2 days or for 1 or 2 years or may be even more. The author has not provided any informtion, whether the results of the study are representative and whether it applies to all the high school students of all the years.
Second, the author cites that the percentage of students who graduate on-time is higher for private schools than for public schools. The author has merely provided the reletive comparison by comparing the percentage of students graduating on-time from public schools to that of private schools. Perhaps the number on studends who attend public school is much more than that for the private school and the actual number per hundred or pre thousand of studends graduating on-time from public schools is much much larger than for private school. The author has not provided any information on the actual number of students graduating on-time in both public and private schools.
Thirdly, the author conclusion is based on the students graduating on-time in both public and private schools. But the author's use of the word on-time is ambigious. It can perhaps be the case that the public schools have mandated 1 year teaching for studends before they actually recieve their graduation certificates. Also, it can be a case that the duration of course's at public schools are more comprehensive and exhaustive and for this reason they are longer than the same courses at private schools which are not that comprehensive or exhasutive. The author should provide more information to bolster her point.
Finally, the author concludes that the parents who want their children to graduate from high school on time should send them to private school. The author has not provided any information whether the studens graduating ontime from private schools are getting better opportunities than the students who are graduating from the public schools not on-time. If the studens who are not gratuating ontime from public schools are getting bigger and better opportunities than the students who are graduating ontime from private schools the parents will find public schools more attractive than private schools.
In sum, the author's argument is not pursuasive and convincing as it stands. Had it included the aforementioned points the author would have not only strenghtened and bolstered his argument but also would have made his argument more pusuasive and convincing.
First of all, the author cites that a study of high school shows that the percentage of students who graduate on time is higher for private schools than for public schools. But the author has not provided any information of how the study was carried out, who were the respondants, what was the duration of the study that is whether the study was carried out for 1 or 2 days or for 1 or 2 years or may be even more. The author has not provided any informtion, whether the results of the study are representative and whether it applies to all the high school students of all the years.
Second, the author cites that the percentage of students who graduate on-time is higher for private schools than for public schools. The author has merely provided the reletive comparison by comparing the percentage of students graduating on-time from public schools to that of private schools. Perhaps the number on studends who attend public school is much more than that for the private school and the actual number per hundred or pre thousand of studends graduating on-time from public schools is much much larger than for private school. The author has not provided any information on the actual number of students graduating on-time in both public and private schools.
Thirdly, the author conclusion is based on the students graduating on-time in both public and private schools. But the author's use of the word on-time is ambigious. It can perhaps be the case that the public schools have mandated 1 year teaching for studends before they actually recieve their graduation certificates. Also, it can be a case that the duration of course's at public schools are more comprehensive and exhaustive and for this reason they are longer than the same courses at private schools which are not that comprehensive or exhasutive. The author should provide more information to bolster her point.
Finally, the author concludes that the parents who want their children to graduate from high school on time should send them to private school. The author has not provided any information whether the studens graduating ontime from private schools are getting better opportunities than the students who are graduating from the public schools not on-time. If the studens who are not gratuating ontime from public schools are getting bigger and better opportunities than the students who are graduating ontime from private schools the parents will find public schools more attractive than private schools.
In sum, the author's argument is not pursuasive and convincing as it stands. Had it included the aforementioned points the author would have not only strenghtened and bolstered his argument but also would have made his argument more pusuasive and convincing.
