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Is this sentence right

by bblast » Wed Jun 15, 2011 1:46 am
The Illusionist,a novel by Jennifer Johnston, an Irish author, was first published in 1995 by
Sinclair Stevenson and is considered one of her best works.

The Illusionist,a novel by Irish author Jennifer Johnston, was first published in 1995
by Sinclair Stevenson and is considered one of her best works.


which would you choose and more importantly why ?
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by sameerballani » Wed Jun 15, 2011 2:00 am
bblast wrote:The Illusionist,a novel by Jennifer Johnston, an Irish author, was first published in 1995 by
Sinclair Stevenson and is considered one of her best works.

The Illusionist,a novel by Irish author Jennifer Johnston, was first published in 1995
by Sinclair Stevenson and is considered one of her best works.


which would you choose and more importantly why ?
Although I am not sure whether A is wrong or not, But i ll choose B

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by aspirant2011 » Wed Jun 15, 2011 2:04 am
Yup I would also go with B because in A unnecessary sentence fragmentation is there by having another modifier as Irish Author........

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by bblast » Wed Jun 15, 2011 2:40 am
hmmm,,good catch guys but actually the official explanation(Aristotle) says that the sentence has back to back modifiers that makes the sentence incorrect.(there was another very obvious error{use of - consider as} which I have removed here)

Can an expert highlight the incorrect usage of the 2 modifiers here? are both modifiers attempting to modify the "The Illusionist" ?
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