Sentence Correction

In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the
creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them.
A. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the creation of
Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them
B. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images and on construction and decoration of the temples in which they
were enshrined
C. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images as well as constructing and decoration of the temples in which
they were enshrined
D. creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them
E. the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them

EDIT : How to eliminate D ?
My question is not how to arrive at the OA .
OA B

mundasingh123 wrote:In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the
creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them.
A. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the creation of
Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them
B. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images and on construction and decoration of the temples in which they
were enshrined
C. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images as well as constructing and decoration of the temples in which
they were enshrined
D. creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them
E. the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them

How to eliminate E ?
My question is not how to arrive at the OA .
OA B

E is wrong because of parallelism issue, if you notice initial part of the sentence says "accounted for much of the local artisans' creative energy" and latter part starts with "as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them"............it would have been parallel if the latter part would have been "and for construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them"

aspirant2011 wrote:

mundasingh123 wrote:In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the
creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them.
A. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the creation of
Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them
B. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images and on construction and decoration of the temples in which they
were enshrined
C. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images as well as constructing and decoration of the temples in which
they were enshrined
D. creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them
E. the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them

How to eliminate E ?
My question is not how to arrive at the OA .
OA B

E is wrong because of parallelism issue, if you notice initial part of the sentence says "accounted for much of the local artisans' creative energy" and latter part starts with "as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them"............it would have been parallel if the latter part would have been "and for construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them"

Sorry EDITED my question
How to eliminate D
Anyways the OG OE is different for E and not what you stated it to be

mundasingh123 wrote:D. creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them

if you see option D then "and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them" falls apart from rest of the sentence as it seems that only "creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative energy,".......if option D would have been like "creating images of Buddha and constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them accounted for much of the local artisans' creative energy" then it would have been better..........

How can I make D correct? I guess as below

energy 'accounted' in "making" images and time 'expended' in "constructing" temples for the same.

aspirant2011 wrote:

mundasingh123 wrote:D. creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them

if you see option D then "and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them" falls apart from rest of the sentence as it seems that only "creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative energy,".......if option D would have been like "creating images of Buddha and constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them accounted for much of the local artisans' creative energy" then it would have been better..........

Hi Thanks aspirant , HSPA ,But I am looking for a grammatical reason why D is wrong . I did go through the OG explanation and was not content with the reason that it gave .

Hi, i think Op D multiple problems

1) it has a run-on sentence error

Op D:

In ancient Thailand, creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them

part in green is an Independent clause connected to a phrase (in red) via COMMA + FANBOY incorrectly.

secondly, if u think that the part in red is a modifier and hence correct then, this modifier is completely wrong...why??? because if u ask question from the modifier "who constructing and decorating..." then it should be "artisans" but no "artisans" is present in the preceding clause...the only related word present there is "artisans' creative
energy" which is equal to "energy"....this means that modifier is modifying nothing and its totally wrong.

Hope this help!!!

atulmangal wrote:Hi, i think Op D multiple problems

1) it has a run-on sentence error

Op D:

In ancient Thailand, creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them

part in green is an Independent clause connected to a phrase (in red) via COMMA + FANBOY incorrectly.

secondly, if u think that the part in red is a modifier and hence correct then, this modifier is completely wrong...why??? because if u ask question from the modifier "who constructing and decorating..." then it should be "artisans" but no "artisans" is present in the preceding clause...the only related word present there is "artisans' creative
energy" which is equal to "energy"....this means that modifier is modifying nothing and its totally wrong.

Hope this help!!!

Fanboys more often than never connect an independent clause to a phrase .
I love to see pictures of pets and posters with inspirational quotes .
The 1st part is , of course , an independent sentence .

secondly, if u think that the part in red is a modifier and hence correct then, this modifier is completely wrong...why??? because if u ask question from the modifier "who constructing and decorating..." then it should be "artisans" but no "artisans" is present in the preceding clause...the only related word present there is "artisans' creative

In this case creating images of Buddha should also be wrong

mundasingh123 wrote: Fanboys more often than never connect an independent clause to a phrase .
I love to see pictures of pets and posters with inspirational quotes .
The 1st part is , of course , an independent sentence .

Hi,
Your example for connecting independent clause and phrase is correct because you haven't used comma. But opD is using 'comma+FANBOYS', which is used to connect independent clauses. Hence, D is wrong.

mundasingh123 wrote:In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the
creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them.
A. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the creation of
Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them
B. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images and on construction and decoration of the temples in which they
were enshrined
C. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images as well as constructing and decoration of the temples in which
they were enshrined
D. creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them
E. the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them

EDIT : How to eliminate D ?
My question is not how to arrive at the OA .
OA B

A verb that functions as a noun (such as constructing in answer choice D) still suggests tense.
In D, constructing...enshrining suggests that the two actions are happening at the same time.
Since the constructing has to happen before the enshrining, eliminate D.
Answer choice B avoids this issue by using the noun construction, which does not convey tense.

@mundasingh123

Fanboys more often than never connect an independent clause to a phrase .
I love to see pictures of pets and posters with inspirational quotes .
The 1st part is , of course , an independent sentence .

In the above example, the independent clause is "I love to see pictures of pets and posters"

In GMAT, COMMA + AND either connect the final element of a list of more then 2 items or to connect 2 independent clause.

For example: modifying your example: COMMA + AND connecting final element of list.

I love to see pictures of pets, posters, and stars with inspirational quotes.

so if u sum up the understanding and apply in Op D, there COMMA + AND neither connecting two IC's nor connecting a list of items. hence COMMA + AND usage is clearly wrong.

In this case creating images of Buddha should also be wrong

I don't understand the above post...what do u mean here: i think if the sentence is only this much

"In ancient Thailand, creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans'creative energy"

i think this above written sentence is okay.

GMATGuruNY wrote:

mundasingh123 wrote:In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the
creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them.
A. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the creation of
Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them
B. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images and on construction and decoration of the temples in which they
were enshrined
C. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images as well as constructing and decoration of the temples in which
they were enshrined
D. creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them
E. the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them

EDIT : How to eliminate D ?
My question is not how to arrive at the OA .
OA B

A verb that is used as a noun (such as constructing in answer choice D) still suggests tense.
In D, constructing...enshrining suggests that the two actions are happening at the same time.
Since the constructing has to happen before the enshrining, eliminate D.
Answer choice B avoids this issue by using the noun construction, which does not convey tense.

Hi Mitch Thanks for the help .
Could you you also clarify if there is any other change in meaning besides the point that you mentioned about both the actions taking place at the same time .
Is (D) grammatically correct ?
Does D convey that " constructing and decorating the temples " is also responsible for much of the local artisans' creative
energy

the creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them

mundasingh123 wrote:

GMATGuruNY wrote:

mundasingh123 wrote:In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the
creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them.
A. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the creation of
Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them
B. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images and on construction and decoration of the temples in which they
were enshrined
C. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images as well as constructing and decoration of the temples in which
they were enshrined
D. creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them
E. the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them

EDIT : How to eliminate D ?
My question is not how to arrive at the OA .
OA B

A verb that is used as a noun (such as constructing in answer choice D) still suggests tense.
In D, constructing...enshrining suggests that the two actions are happening at the same time.
Since the constructing has to happen before the enshrining, eliminate D.
Answer choice B avoids this issue by using the noun construction, which does not convey tense.

Hi Mitch Thanks for the help .
Could you you also clarify if there is any other change in meaning besides the point that you mentioned about both the actions taking place at the same time .
Is (D) grammatically correct ?
Does D convey that " constructing and decorating the temples " is also responsible for much of the local artisans' creative
energy

the creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them

In D, it needs to be made clear that constructing and decorating are subjects of the verb accounted:

...creating, constructing and decorating...accounted for much of the local artistans' energy...
...creating...accounted for much of local artisans' energy, as did constructing and decorating...

The latter version feels awkward.
Regardless, since the function of the last phrase in D is unclear, eliminate D. It must be clear how every part of the answer choice is functioning.

GMATGuruNY wrote:

mundasingh123 wrote:

GMATGuruNY wrote:

mundasingh123 wrote:In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the
creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them.
A. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the creation of
Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them
B. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images and on construction and decoration of the temples in which they
were enshrined
C. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images as well as constructing and decoration of the temples in which
they were enshrined
D. creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them
E. the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them

EDIT : How to eliminate D ?
My question is not how to arrive at the OA .
OA B

A verb that is used as a noun (such as constructing in answer choice D) still suggests tense.
In D, constructing...enshrining suggests that the two actions are happening at the same time.
Since the constructing has to happen before the enshrining, eliminate D.
Answer choice B avoids this issue by using the noun construction, which does not convey tense.

Hi Mitch Thanks for the help .
Could you you also clarify if there is any other change in meaning besides the point that you mentioned about both the actions taking place at the same time .
Is (D) grammatically correct ?
Does D convey that " constructing and decorating the temples " is also responsible for much of the local artisans' creative
energy

the creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them

In D, it needs to be made clear that constructing and decorating are subjects of the verb accounted:

...creating, constructing and decorating...accounted for much of the local artistans' energy...
...creating...accounted for much of local artisans' energy, as did constructing and decorating...

The latter version feels awkward.
Regardless, since the function of the last phrase in D is unclear, eliminate D. It must be clear how every part of the answer choice is functioning.

Hi Mitch you said since the function of the last phrase in D is unclear . Is it because there is no verb there in the last phrase "and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them"

mundasingh123 wrote:

GMATGuruNY wrote:

mundasingh123 wrote:

GMATGuruNY wrote:

mundasingh123 wrote:In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the
creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them.
A. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the creation of
Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them
B. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images and on construction and decoration of the temples in which they
were enshrined
C. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images as well as constructing and decoration of the temples in which
they were enshrined
D. creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them
E. the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them

EDIT : How to eliminate D ?
My question is not how to arrive at the OA .
OA B

A verb that is used as a noun (such as constructing in answer choice D) still suggests tense.
In D, constructing...enshrining suggests that the two actions are happening at the same time.
Since the constructing has to happen before the enshrining, eliminate D.
Answer choice B avoids this issue by using the noun construction, which does not convey tense.

Hi Mitch Thanks for the help .
Could you you also clarify if there is any other change in meaning besides the point that you mentioned about both the actions taking place at the same time .
Is (D) grammatically correct ?
Does D convey that " constructing and decorating the temples " is also responsible for much of the local artisans' creative
energy

the creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them

In D, it needs to be made clear that constructing and decorating are subjects of the verb accounted:

...creating, constructing and decorating...accounted for much of the local artistans' energy...
...creating...accounted for much of local artisans' energy, as did constructing and decorating...

The latter version feels awkward.
Regardless, since the function of the last phrase in D is unclear, eliminate D. It must be clear how every part of the answer choice is functioning.

Hi Mitch you said since the function of the last phrase in D is unclear . Is it because there is no verb there in the last phrase "and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them"

Exactly. The basic construction is:

X accounted for much of Y, and also Z.

The purpose of the red phrase is unclear: did X and Z account for much of Y, or did X account for much of Y and for much of Z?

Since the purpose of the red phrase is unclear, we should eliminate the answer choice.