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# Feedback Requested for AWA Essay (1st Attempt)

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#### Feedback Requested for AWA Essay (1st Attempt)

“Over time, the costs of processing go down because as organizations learn how to do things better, they become more efficient. In color film processing, for example, the cost of a 3-by-5-inch print fell from 50 cents for five-day service in 1970 to 20 cents for one-day service in 1984. The same principle applies to the processing of food. And since Olympic Foods will soon celebrate its 25th birthday, we can expect that our long experience will enable us to minimize costs and thus maximize profits.”

The argument claims that the costs of processing go down over time as organizations learn how to do things better. It then concludes that Olympic Foods will experience the same trend of minimized costs and maximized profits as the organization turns 25 years old soon. There are several key factors that are missing from the argument, on the basis of which it can be evaluated. There are several assumptions that provide basis for the argument, none of which are clearly supported by evidence. Thus, the argument is rather weak, unconvincing, and flawed.

First, the argument claims that the costs of processing goes down over time due to the fact that organizations learn how to do things better. It states that this in turn makes the organization more efficient. However, this proves an ill-defined cause and effect relationship between the age of an organization and lower costs. The argument fails to recognize several factors in the economy that can be attributed to lower costs. For example, a fall in processing costs can be a fall in demand or a rise in supply of raw materials. It is also true that over time, the processing costs also go up. For instance, the price of mining oil has become more expensive as the supply of oil fields are declining. The argument would have been much more convincing if it provided evidence for a clear causal relationship between the age of an organization and the fall in processing costs.

Second, the argument readily assumes that color film processing and food processing are subject to the same operational principles. This is a very weak and unsupported claim without any clear evidence. There are no parallels drawn to suggest that the two industries are similar. Furthermore, the argument suggests that minimizing costs leads to maximization of profits. There are several counter-examples to negate this claim. For example, no matter that reduction in costs, a fall in sales will cause a fall in profits. Since the argument does not convincingly justify these relationships, the argument and its conclusion have no legs to stand on.

In conclusion, the argument fails to provide evidence to suggest that the age of the organization leads to improved operations which then lower costs. In addition, it fails to draw clear parallels between the color film and food industries, while failing to justify the correlation between costs and profits. For these reasons, the conclusion is unconvincing and flawed.

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Hi Chirag,

I think its great.
And please also review my essay(as its my 1st attempt too).

Essay:-

The argument is basically flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on the flawed assumption that Film Industry is similar to Food Production Industry, rendering its main conclusion, that Olympic Foods will minimize costs and maximize profits just as Film Industry did.

The argument fails to provide any justification that Film Industry and Food Industry are same. For one, the processes and policies on which food industry work might be different from those of Film Industry. This important difference can help to explain the outcome.More significantly, the argument states that the cost of production will decrease. If Food Industry old machines are wearing out and thus need urgent repairs, then if it has to buy new machinery then cost of production might shoot up.

The argument fails to provide the reason behind the fall of prices from 1970 to 1984 in film industry. The cost of film can decline due to numerous reasons. For example, a new technology, which reduced the cost of production in Film Industry, might be introduced in the market that reduced the cost of production in Film Industry. Had the argument provided the reason behind the fall of prices, then the concern would not be valid any more.

Additionally, the argument fails the comment on the economic conditions in 1970 and in 1984.It might be possible that due to change in government policies that the cost of production decreased. Had the argument provided any information which said that the economic conditions are same, then this concern will not be valid.

As the argument makes many unwarranted assumptions, it fails to make a convincing case that Olympic Foods can expect that long experience will help in minimizing costs and thus maximizing profits.

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