Argument Essay - Please rate. Thank you.

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Argument Essay - Please rate. Thank you.

by awdowr » Tue Nov 29, 2011 11:40 am
The following appeared in a report presented for discussion at a meeting of the directors of a company that manufactures parts for heavy machinery.

"The falling revenue that the company is experiencing coincides with delays in manufacturing. These delays, in turn, are due in large part to poor planning in purchasing metals. Consider further that the manager of the department that handles purchasing of raw materials has an excellent background in general business, psychology and sociology, but knows little about the properties of metals. The company should, therefore move the purchasing manger to the sales department and bring in a scientist from the research division to be the manager of the purchasing department."

My Response:

During a meeting, it was discussed that the company's revenue is declining due to delays in purchasing metals by the purchasing manager. The manager that handles the purchasing of raw materials has a background in psychology, general business and sociology but know little of about the properties of metals. Because of this, the company would like to move the purchasing manager to the sales department and bring in a scientist from the research division to be the manager of the purchasing dept. The author's reasoning is flawed and unconvincing.

First, how do we know if the scientist can do a better job than the current purchasing manager can? Just because the scientist might know the properties of metals doesn't mean he or she can run a mfg department. In addition, the current manager has a degree in general business; one can conclude the department would run better by a person with a business background than a science background.

Second, we are not told that the purchasing manager has any sales background. How do we know the purchasing manager can do a better job in the sales department? Moreover, how do we know the scientist would succeed in the purchasing department? We are not told what type of background the scientist has so we cannot say he or she would a better job than the purchasing manager did.

Finally, could there only be one reason - poor planning in purchasing by a manager who lacks the right credentials - why company revenues are declining? Could there have been other areas where delays in delivery were more at fault than the manager's background? How about shipping from other companies were delayed. Perhaps there was a big winter storm back east which affected delivery.

In sum, the author's conclusion on replacing the purchasing manager with a scientist is not convincing. To strengthen the argument, the author could have provided additional background information on the scientist, purchasing manager's sales skills, and any other reasons why there were delays in shipment.
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by chieftang » Tue Nov 29, 2011 1:15 pm
I have no clue how to rate your essay, but my informal and unorganized comments are as follows... The report establishes absolutely no causal relationship between a scientific understanding of the metals' physical properties and the ability to plan for their purchase. So in my mind the conclusion is dubious at best. Poor planning in purchasing of metals probably correlates more to a poor understanding of macroeconomic conditions related to futures prices of raw materials (a dynamic condition) than any scientific knowledge of physical properties (a static condition). We can reasonably assume that cost constraints are placed upon the purchasing manager, so in an environment of rising commodity prices planning is needed to ensure that future inventories of the materials required for manufacturing do not run low and delay production. A scientist with knowledge of metal properties might be able to better predict the consumption rate of specific materials and therefore be able to plan for inventory shortages in this manner, but over time there should be enough empirical data for a layperson to utilize for the same purpose. Perhaps, therefore, advisement from a scientist is warranted at the outset of a new product line, but in the long term we should expect diminishing returns from the scientific perspective. So in the arena of commodities purchasing, I'll take an businessperson - and particularly one with knowledge of economics - over a scientist any day of the week and twice on Sunday. This particular purchaser may not be the ideal person for the job, but his background is better suited to this position than the scientist's is likely to be.

PS - As to your essay, I see no reason to spend the first paragraph rephrasing the original statement. Is this an accepted strategy of some sort? I don't like it.

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