patanjali.purpose wrote:A number of innovations shaped the course of the decade long world war II, however the invention that was the most important among all inventions {{were the atomic bomb that demonstrated}} the superiority of firepower of allied forces.
A) were the atomic bomb that demonstrated
B) was the atomic bomb that demonstrated
C) is the atomic bomb that demonstrated
D) are the atomic bomb that demonstrated
E) had been the atomic bomb that demonstrated
OA to follow
This sentence is rife with errors in the non-underlined portion.
1. COMMA + HOWEVER cannot be used to connect two independent clauses.
2.
decade long -- an atypical construction in which a noun (
decade) is being used to modify an adjective (
long) -- requires a hyphen:
the decade-long WWII.
3.
The invention that was most important AMONG ALL INVENTIONS seems redundant.
4. The restrictive modifier
THAT demonstrated implies that there was more than one atomic bomb invented and that the SC needs to make clear which atomic bomb is being discussed. (It's akin to saying
John lives in the United States THAT lies below Canada, as though there more than one United States.) Since the SC is discussing
THE invention that was most important --
THE atomic bomb -- a non-restrictive modifier is needed:
the atomic bomb, WHICH demonstrated the superiority...
5.
world war II and
allied should capitalized.
I would ignore this sentence. What is the source?
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