Based on records from ancient Athens....

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Based on records from ancient Athens....

by s_raizada » Thu Jun 12, 2008 8:59 am
Based on records from ancient Athens, each year young Athenian women collaborated to weave a new woolen robe that they used to dress a statue of the goddess Athena and that this robe depicted scenes of a battle between Zeus, Athena's father, and giants.

(A) Based on records from ancient Athens, each year young Athenian women collaborated to weave a new woolen robe that they used to dress
(B) Based on records from ancient Athens, each year young Athenian women had collaborated to weave a new woolen robe with which to dress
(C) According to records from ancient Athens, each year young Athenian women collaborated to weave a new woolen robe that they used to dress
(D) Records from ancient Athens indicate that each year young Athenian women collaborated to weave a new woolen robe with which they dressed
(E) Records from ancient Athens indicate each year young Athenian women had collaborated to weave a new woolen robe for dressing

Why D not C? Please explain?
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by airan » Thu Jun 12, 2008 9:15 am
Can u underline the part of the sentence to be corrected ?
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by chidcguy » Thu Jun 12, 2008 10:25 am
What is According to records from ancient Athens?

The answer as per C is each year young Athenian women

the modifier is broken.

In D


Reports indicate that XYZ and that ABC. parallelism maintained before and after and

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by s_raizada » Thu Jun 12, 2008 12:00 pm
Chidcguy,

I am not sure about the usage of 'According to' as a participial phrase.

I think the real problem with C is the wordiness

If you expand the C it will be
'robe that they used to dress..... and rob that this rob......'

The phrase in bold is wordy.

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