Kindly assess my AWA essay. Below is the essay:
The installation of electronic, high-speed scanning devices at the entrances and exits of toll roads will obviate the need for toll booths. Automobiles will have scanner sensitive license plates- like the bar codes on consumer packaged products- so that the scanner devices will record the license number of cars entering and exiting the toll road. Car owners will be billed monthly by the highway authorities.
Discuss how logically persuasive you find the above argument. In presenting your point of view, analyze the sort of reasoning used and supporting evidence. In addition, state what further evidence, if any, would make the argument more sound and convincing or would make you better able to evaluate its conclusion.
AWA ESSAY:
The argument states that it makes sense to replace the toll booths by electronic, high- speed scanning devices at the entrance and exits of the toll roads. It further states that the automobiles will have sensitive license plates that will be scanned by the devices. The defaulters will be billed monthly by the highway authorities. However this line of reasoning is fraught with erroneous logics and conclusion.
First, the arguments talks about replacing toll booths with scanning devices without mentioning the cost of replacement and maintenance. If the cost of replacing and maintaining the scanning devices is more than than that of toll booth, then such changes won't be economically viable.
Second, the argument doesn't throw any light about what will happen to automobiles without scanner sensitive license plates. Those cars will pass through the toll without paying their bills.
Third, the argument fails to provide information on the error percentage of the total scanning done by the electronic scanning devices. By calculating the error percentage of the devices, the highway authorities will be able to calculate their monthly loses to justify the use of such devices.
The argument could have been more convincing had it provided more data. If the argument would have provided data on costs of installing and maintaining electronic scanning devices and error percentage of total scanning done by the device, then it would have easier to calculate the cost advantage of using the new technology. Also, knowing about what will happen to automobiles who don't have a scanner sensitive license plate, would have added more credibility to the use of technology. In the light of discussing above discrepancies, it can be concluded that the argument is flawed and remains unconvincing.
The installation of electronic, high-speed scanning devices at the entrances and exits of toll roads will obviate the need for toll booths. Automobiles will have scanner sensitive license plates- like the bar codes on consumer packaged products- so that the scanner devices will record the license number of cars entering and exiting the toll road. Car owners will be billed monthly by the highway authorities.
Discuss how logically persuasive you find the above argument. In presenting your point of view, analyze the sort of reasoning used and supporting evidence. In addition, state what further evidence, if any, would make the argument more sound and convincing or would make you better able to evaluate its conclusion.
AWA ESSAY:
The argument states that it makes sense to replace the toll booths by electronic, high- speed scanning devices at the entrance and exits of the toll roads. It further states that the automobiles will have sensitive license plates that will be scanned by the devices. The defaulters will be billed monthly by the highway authorities. However this line of reasoning is fraught with erroneous logics and conclusion.
First, the arguments talks about replacing toll booths with scanning devices without mentioning the cost of replacement and maintenance. If the cost of replacing and maintaining the scanning devices is more than than that of toll booth, then such changes won't be economically viable.
Second, the argument doesn't throw any light about what will happen to automobiles without scanner sensitive license plates. Those cars will pass through the toll without paying their bills.
Third, the argument fails to provide information on the error percentage of the total scanning done by the electronic scanning devices. By calculating the error percentage of the devices, the highway authorities will be able to calculate their monthly loses to justify the use of such devices.
The argument could have been more convincing had it provided more data. If the argument would have provided data on costs of installing and maintaining electronic scanning devices and error percentage of total scanning done by the device, then it would have easier to calculate the cost advantage of using the new technology. Also, knowing about what will happen to automobiles who don't have a scanner sensitive license plate, would have added more credibility to the use of technology. In the light of discussing above discrepancies, it can be concluded that the argument is flawed and remains unconvincing.
