BREAKING: Target Test Prep releases Brand New 2026 On Demand GMAT prep course

Redeem

OG Gmat Review 11th edition Sentence Correction # 134

This topic has expert replies
Post new topic Locked
Previous Topic Next Topic
Legendary Member
Posts: 789
Joined: Sun May 06, 2007 1:25 am
Location: Southern California, USA
Thanked: 15 times
Followed by:6 members

OG Gmat Review 11th edition Sentence Correction # 134

by resilient » Tue Jan 29, 2008 1:57 pm
Recently implemented "shift worker equations" based on studies of the human sleep cycle have reduced sickness,sleeping on the job, fatigue among shift workers, and have raised production efficiency in various industries.

a. same
b. fatigue among shift workers, and raised
c. and fatigue among shift workers while raising
d. lowered fatigue among shift workers, and raised
e. and fatigue among shift workers was lowered while raising

I chose A because the original sentence said HAve REduced ..so I chose A because it has HAS RAISED in it to match the original.
the correct choice is C . even though it has raising in the end. I am lost on the verb tense of this matter. Can anyone help?
Appetite for 700 and I scraped my plate!
Top
Source: — Sentence Correction |
User avatar
GMAT Instructor
Posts: 3225
Joined: Tue Jan 08, 2008 2:40 pm
Location: Toronto
Thanked: 1710 times
Followed by:614 members
GMAT Score:800

Re: OG Gmat Review 11th edition Sentence Correction # 134

by Stuart@KaplanGMAT » Tue Jan 29, 2008 2:14 pm
Enginpasa1 wrote:Recently implemented "shift worker equations" based on studies of the human sleep cycle have reduced sickness,sleeping on the job, fatigue among shift workers, and have raised production efficiency in various industries.

a. same
b. fatigue among shift workers, and raised
c. and fatigue among shift workers while raising
d. lowered fatigue among shift workers, and raised
e. and fatigue among shift workers was lowered while raising
As soon as you see a list of items, think parallelism.

Here we have both a list and a contrast - the new equations have reduced 3 things and raised 1 other. We need to keep the two parts of the sentence separate.

Let's start with our list of factors that were reduced: we want the list to read "reduced a, b and c". The original sentence is missing the "and" in the list, so eliminate (a). The only choices that include the "and" required are (c) and (e), so also elminate (b) and (d).

(e) includes "was lowered" at the end of the list, which is redundant to "reduced". Eliminate (e).

Only one choice left: choose (c) (which includes the contrast keyword "while", another thing we would have looked for if we didn't already know that (c) were correct).
Image

Stuart Kovinsky | Kaplan GMAT Faculty | Toronto

Kaplan Exclusive: The Official Test Day Experience | Ready to Take a Free Practice Test? | Kaplan/Beat the GMAT Member Discount
BTG100 for $100 off a full course
Top
User avatar
Master | Next Rank: 500 Posts
Posts: 100
Joined: Wed Jul 30, 2008 9:52 am
Thanked: 4 times

Correct usage of "While" in GMAT

by ashish1354 » Wed Oct 01, 2008 4:44 am
and fatigue among shift workers while raising = Correct answer

OG explanation suggests that while raising emphasizes contrast with have reduced.

although William Strunk, Jr., the author of The Elements of Style clearly states in his book

While. Avoid the indiscriminate use of this word for and, but, and although. Many writers use it frequently as a substitute for and or but, either from a mere desire to vary the connective, or from uncertainty which of the two connectives is the more appropriate. In this use it is best replaced by a semicolon.

In general, the writer will do well to use while only with strict literalness, in the sense of during the time that.

i am lost! Can someone clear the air? what do we chose when "while" turns up
contrast or simultaneous action?
Top
Post new topic Locked
• Page 1 of 1