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by gmat_perfect » Fri Aug 20, 2010 12:02 pm
Surveys have shown that in up to 40 percent of elderly people living independently in affluent countries, the consumption of one or more essential nutrients is insufficient or they have deficient levels of these nutrients in their blood.

(A) in up to 40 percent of elderly people living independently in affluent countries, the consumption of one or more essential nutrients is insufficient or they have
(B) in up to 40 percent of elderly people who live independently in affluent countries, they consume one or more essential nutrients insufficiently or have
(C) in up to 40 percent of elderly people who live independently in affluent countries, one or more essential nutrients are consumed insufficiently or having
(D) up to 40 percent of elderly people living independently in affluent countries who consume insufficient amounts of one or more essential nutrients or who have
(E) up to 40 percent of elderly people who live independently in affluent countries consume insufficient amounts of one or more essential nutrients or have

[spoiler]OA: E[/spoiler]

I could not trace "they" in B. I think that "they" refer to people.

Question: What is the actual mistake in B?

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by indiantiger » Fri Aug 20, 2010 2:40 pm
A, B , C can be thrown out because of un-idiomatic usage of in upto. This leaves you with D and E. E has the right usage of OR. Hence E
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by e-GMAT » Fri Aug 20, 2010 4:12 pm
gmat_perfect wrote:Surveys have shown that in up to 40 percent of elderly people living independently in affluent countries, the consumption of one or more essential nutrients is insufficient or they have deficient levels of these nutrients in their blood.

(B) in up to 40 percent of elderly people who live independently in affluent countries, they consume one or more essential nutrients insufficiently or have

Question: What is the actual mistake in B?

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B can be simplified as follows:

"Surveys have shown that in xyz number of elderly people, people consume ..."

This sentence is non-sensical since it states that "in people, people consume..."

Let me know if this makes sense

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by gmat_perfect » Sat Aug 21, 2010 1:18 am
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by ankurmit » Sat Aug 21, 2010 1:24 am
I will go with E
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by paes » Sat Aug 21, 2010 9:17 am
gmat_perfect,


The problem with B is modifier issue.

See,

Surveys have shown that in up to 40 percent of elderly people, they consume ..... [ wrong modifier ]

the sentence can be written as :

Surveys have shown that in up to 40 percent of elderly people, the consumption of nutrients ........

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