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The following appeared as part of the business plan of the Capital Ideainvestment firm.
Across town in the Park Hill district, the Thespian Theatre, Pizzazz and the Niblick Golf Club have all had business increases over the past two years. Capital idea should therefore invest in the Roxy Playhouse, the Slice-o'-Pizza and the Divot Golf Club, three new businesses in the Irongate district. As a condition, we co should require them to participate in a special program. Any customer who patronizes two of the businesses will receive a substantial discount at the third. By motivating customers to patronize all three, we will thus contribute to the profitability of each and maximize our return.
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underline the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate in conclusion.
Answer:
In the argument above, the author concludes that Capital Idea should invest in Roxy Playhouse, Slice-O'-Pizza and Divot Golf club and also ask these businesses to participate in a special program of providing customers who patronize any of the two businesses with substantial discounts at the third to increase the profits of the businesses and maximize returns for itself. The premise of the argument is the success of the Thespian Theatre, Pizzazz and the Niblick Golf Club in Park Hill district. The argument is flawed because it wrongly assumes that these businesses which succeeded in Park Hill district will give same results in the Irongate district and also because it assumes that the special program will surely lead to increased profits.
First, the author wrongly assumes that the success achieved by the Thespian Theatre, Pizzazz and the Niblick Golf Club in Park Hill district can also be achieved by Roxy Playhouse, the Slice-o'-Pizza and the Divot Golf Club in Irongate district. It is possible that the population of these towns has completely different tastes & interests and hence these businesses may result in losses instead of profits in Irongate district. Moreover it may be some unique attributes of the Thespian Theatre, Pizzazz and the Niblick Golf Club that make them stand out and hence profitable which may be lacking in Roxy Playhouse, the Slice-o'-Pizza and the Divot Golf Club and hence may be unable to attract customers going to competitors that offer better service.
Second, the claim that introduction of special program will lead to increased profits has not been supported with proof of previous success. It may happen that the introduction of the special program may initially increase customers to the businesses but may lead to decreased profits in future because increased customers at cheaper price can tarnish the aura of exclusivity the key factor of success for these businesses.
Moreover, Had the author provided supporting evidence for the claim that special programs will be beneficial in these businesses and also how these businesses have been performing the Ironstate district the conclusion provided by the author justified and accepted.
In conclusion, the idea that investment in Roxy Playhouse, Slice-O'-Pizza and Divot Golf club will result in profit and special program will result in further increase of profit has not been properly supported and is open to lot of speculation.
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121.
The following appeared as part of the business plan of the Capital Ideainvestment firm.
Across town in the Park Hill district, the Thespian Theatre, Pizzazz and the Niblick Golf Club have all had business increases over the past two years. Capital idea should therefore invest in the Roxy Playhouse, the Slice-o'-Pizza and the Divot Golf Club, three new businesses in the Irongate district. As a condition, we co should require them to participate in a special program. Any customer who patronizes two of the businesses will receive a substantial discount at the third. By motivating customers to patronize all three, we will thus contribute to the profitability of each and maximize our return.
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underline the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate in conclusion.
Answer:
In the argument above, the author concludes that Capital Idea should invest in Roxy Playhouse, Slice-O'-Pizza and Divot Golf club and also ask these businesses to participate in a special program of providing customers who patronize any of the two businesses with substantial discounts at the third to increase the profits of the businesses and maximize returns for itself. The premise of the argument is the success of the Thespian Theatre, Pizzazz and the Niblick Golf Club in Park Hill district. The argument is flawed because it wrongly assumes that these businesses which succeeded in Park Hill district will give same results in the Irongate district and also because it assumes that the special program will surely lead to increased profits.
First, the author wrongly assumes that the success achieved by the Thespian Theatre, Pizzazz and the Niblick Golf Club in Park Hill district can also be achieved by Roxy Playhouse, the Slice-o'-Pizza and the Divot Golf Club in Irongate district. It is possible that the population of these towns has completely different tastes & interests and hence these businesses may result in losses instead of profits in Irongate district. Moreover it may be some unique attributes of the Thespian Theatre, Pizzazz and the Niblick Golf Club that make them stand out and hence profitable which may be lacking in Roxy Playhouse, the Slice-o'-Pizza and the Divot Golf Club and hence may be unable to attract customers going to competitors that offer better service.
Second, the claim that introduction of special program will lead to increased profits has not been supported with proof of previous success. It may happen that the introduction of the special program may initially increase customers to the businesses but may lead to decreased profits in future because increased customers at cheaper price can tarnish the aura of exclusivity the key factor of success for these businesses.
Moreover, Had the author provided supporting evidence for the claim that special programs will be beneficial in these businesses and also how these businesses have been performing the Ironstate district the conclusion provided by the author justified and accepted.
In conclusion, the idea that investment in Roxy Playhouse, Slice-O'-Pizza and Divot Golf club will result in profit and special program will result in further increase of profit has not been properly supported and is open to lot of speculation.
Thanks for reading!
