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armaan700+: Senior | Next Rank: 100 Posts; Posts: 75; Joined: Sun Jun 14, 2009 1:41 amFollowed by: 1 member; Location: india; Thanked: 2 times

by armaan700+ » Wed Feb 03, 2010 7:44 am

A decade after initiating the nation's most comprehensive and aggressive antismoking program, per capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs annually per person to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as in the nation as a whole.
A) per capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs annually per person to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as
B) annual per capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs to about 60, more than twice as great as that
C) California's annual per capita consumption of cigarettes declined from over 125 packs per person to about 60, more than twice as great as the drop
D) California has seen per capita consumption of cigarettes decline from over 125 packs annually to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as that
E) California has seen annual per capita consumption of cigarettes decline from over 125 packs per person to about 60, more than twice as great as that

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by Osirus@VeritasPrep » Wed Feb 03, 2010 7:47 am

I would choose D

With the introductory modifier, you need the subject to come immediately after the comma. You are now between D and E. Choice E is wordy and awkward. Choose D

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by thephoenix » Wed Feb 03, 2010 7:54 am

per capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs annually per person to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as
==>The starting phrase "A decade...program" requires a nown just after the comma, moreover "per capita consumption" and "per person" are repetition.
B) annual per capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs to about 60, more than twice as great as that
==>The starting phrase "A decade...program" requires a nown just after the comma. "more than twice.." should be "a drop more than...."
C) California's annual per capita consumption of cigarettes declined from over 125 packs per person to about 60, more than twice as great as the drop
==>Same as A and B
D) California has seen per capita consumption of cigarettes decline from over 125 packs annually to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as that
==>Correct
E) California has seen annual per capita consumption of cigarettes decline from over 125 packs per person to about 60, more than twice as great as that
==> "per capita consumption" and "per person" are repetition. "more than twice.." is reffering to 60 which is wrong.

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by sumanr84 » Wed Feb 03, 2010 10:04 am

nicely explained by thephoenix n osirus0830.

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by komal » Thu Feb 04, 2010 7:29 am

armaan700+ wrote:A decade after initiating the nation's most comprehensive and aggressive antismoking program, per capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs annually per person to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as in the nation as a whole.

A) per capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs annually per person to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as - Redundant

B) annual per capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs to about 60, more than twice as great as that - Awkward

C) California's annual per capita consumption of cigarettes declined from over 125 packs per person to about 60, more than twice as great as the drop - Redundant

D) California has seen per capita consumption of cigarettes decline from over 125 packs annually to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as that - Clear n Concise

E) California has seen annual per capita consumption of cigarettes decline from over 125 packs per person to about 60, more than twice as great as that - Redundant

(D) wins !

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by ramsharma » Thu Feb 04, 2010 7:45 am

D) California has seen per capita consumption of cigarettes decline from over 125 packs annually to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as that

Hi all,
In option D,decline ..... and drop are used? isn't it a redundant here

RAM SHARMA

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by Osirus@VeritasPrep » Thu Feb 04, 2010 7:50 am

ramsharma wrote:D) California has seen per capita consumption of cigarettes decline from over 125 packs annually to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as that

Hi all,
In option D,decline ..... and drop are used? isn't it a redundant here

You have to have "a drop, in order for that clause to have a subject. You need the subject in order to make the comparison logical. If you read MGMAT SC guide, they will discuss how some things that we may consider repetitive are allowed on the GMAT, so don't automatically rule out an answer because it appears to be repetitive.

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by hariharakarthi » Mon May 24, 2010 7:58 am

California has seen per capita consumption of cigarettes decline from over 125 packs annually to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as that in the nation as a whole.

I think "a drop" in ans choice D is a Appostive noun. Then, that Noun is compared withe Nation's result.
Experts is my understanig correct?
Correct me if I am wrong.

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hhk

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