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Hello,

I would some feedback on my profile and some suggestions are areas I can improve.

Demographics: 28 year old male. Half Japanese. Born in Japan, but grew up primarily in California. I lived in Japan for about 8 years.

GMAT: 710 (47Q/40V/6.0 AWA/8 IR)

Academics: 3.43 GPA from Brigham Young University. BA in Japanese with a minor in business (3.79 major GPA). Graduated in 2008. (Note: I moved back to the US when I was 10 years old and didn't speak Japanese again until I was 19. I decided to major in Japanese to deepen my understanding of the language and the culture that was such a large part of my heritage.)

Work History: 1+ years at Goldman Sachs as an operations analyst. I have been promoted once and expect to be promoted to an associate in January. At matriculation, I will have 2 and a half years at Goldman.

-Prior to Goldman, I spent 2 and a half years at an HR Consulting firm/corporate milestone and recognition award manufacturer and distributor. I worked in international operations managing client and vendor relations in Japan, China, India, Singapore, Hong Kong, and Australia. I started at the company as a general international operation rep, but moved up to managing those international client and vendor relations.

Extracurricular: In early 2011 I founded a non-profit organization to help increase community awareness of childhood sexual abuse, and to provide financial assistance to underprivileged victims in need of one-on-one counseling. We have helped several victims and I have had the chance to speak to hundreds of members of the community. I was awarded the Lieutenant Governor's Volunteer Recognition Award in 2011 for my work in the community.

-I have also been a mentor/instructor for Junior Achievement since the beginning of 2013.

-I am also an ambassador for the Trevor Project in my state, and I regularly respond to LGBT teen's questions regarding struggle they are facing in everyday life.

-I am an avid runner and have run in several marathons.

-I served a two-year mission for the LDS church in Japan. For one of those years I was a regional leader and oversaw the work and well-being of 20 to 30 other missionaries.

Post MBA goals: Short-term - To transition from operations in the financial industry into an operations leadership role in the consumer products industry (Ideally a place like Nike).

Long-term - To become of the COO of a global consumer products company and use the business knowledge and experience I have gained to become an influential leader within the community especially with youth related organizations.

Interested in feedback for Tuck, Haas, Kellogg, Sloan, Yale SOM, Darden, and Anderson.

Thanks!
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by MBAApply » Sun Jun 09, 2013 1:12 pm
MBAreapplicant84 wrote:Hello,

I would some feedback on my profile and some suggestions are areas I can improve.

Demographics: 28 year old male. Half Japanese. Born in Japan, but grew up primarily in California. I lived in Japan for about 8 years.

GMAT: 710 (47Q/40V/6.0 AWA/8 IR)

Academics: 3.43 GPA from Brigham Young University. BA in Japanese with a minor in business (3.79 major GPA). Graduated in 2008. (Note: I moved back to the US when I was 10 years old and didn't speak Japanese again until I was 19. I decided to major in Japanese to deepen my understanding of the language and the culture that was such a large part of my heritage.)

Work History: 1+ years at Goldman Sachs as an operations analyst. I have been promoted once and expect to be promoted to an associate in January. At matriculation, I will have 2 and a half years at Goldman.

-Prior to Goldman, I spent 2 and a half years at an HR Consulting firm/corporate milestone and recognition award manufacturer and distributor. I worked in international operations managing client and vendor relations in Japan, China, India, Singapore, Hong Kong, and Australia. I started at the company as a general international operation rep, but moved up to managing those international client and vendor relations.

Extracurricular: In early 2011 I founded a non-profit organization to help increase community awareness of childhood sexual abuse, and to provide financial assistance to underprivileged victims in need of one-on-one counseling. We have helped several victims and I have had the chance to speak to hundreds of members of the community. I was awarded the Lieutenant Governor's Volunteer Recognition Award in 2011 for my work in the community.

-I have also been a mentor/instructor for Junior Achievement since the beginning of 2013.

-I am also an ambassador for the Trevor Project in my state, and I regularly respond to LGBT teen's questions regarding struggle they are facing in everyday life.

-I am an avid runner and have run in several marathons.

-I served a two-year mission for the LDS church in Japan. For one of those years I was a regional leader and oversaw the work and well-being of 20 to 30 other missionaries.

Post MBA goals: Short-term - To transition from operations in the financial industry into an operations leadership role in the consumer products industry (Ideally a place like Nike).

Long-term - To become of the COO of a global consumer products company and use the business knowledge and experience I have gained to become an influential leader within the community especially with youth related organizations.

Interested in feedback for Tuck, Haas, Kellogg, Sloan, Yale SOM, Darden, and Anderson.

Thanks!
Sounds like your non-work experiences are more compelling than your work experience. At least you're not a worker drone! (And being involved in the Trevor Project and the LDS mission is an interesting juxtaposition: if you are gay and it ties into that dual identity, that could make an interesting narrative, and on top of that being hapa).

Your work experience isn't bad, but it is a big part of where you are competitive for.

Anyhow, I think you're targeting the right range of schools. Top 8 are stretches (but worth applying to 3), and top 16 are sweet spots (choose 3).

At this point it's just a matter of doing the best you can on the applications, and hoping for the best. Good luck!

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by ErinaApphelp » Sun Jun 09, 2013 9:40 pm
Hi,

Your ECs and post-MBA goals seems quite interesting. You have an avg. GPA & good GMAT score. You just need to skillfully write application essays and showcase your achievements in or outside work place, leadership style, ability to work with others & additional aptitudes during final interviews. If you are able to demonstrate these elements in essays & interview then you will stand a chance in b-school(s). However, yo u may try your chances in b-school(s) by clicking https://tinyurl.com/k6r5w6x

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MBAreapplicant84 wrote:Hello,

I would some feedback on my profile and some suggestions are areas I can improve.

Demographics: 28 year old male. Half Japanese. Born in Japan, but grew up primarily in California. I lived in Japan for about 8 years.

GMAT: 710 (47Q/40V/6.0 AWA/8 IR)

Academics: 3.43 GPA from Brigham Young University. BA in Japanese with a minor in business (3.79 major GPA). Graduated in 2008. (Note: I moved back to the US when I was 10 years old and didn't speak Japanese again until I was 19. I decided to major in Japanese to deepen my understanding of the language and the culture that was such a large part of my heritage.)

Work History: 1+ years at Goldman Sachs as an operations analyst. I have been promoted once and expect to be promoted to an associate in January. At matriculation, I will have 2 and a half years at Goldman.

-Prior to Goldman, I spent 2 and a half years at an HR Consulting firm/corporate milestone and recognition award manufacturer and distributor. I worked in international operations managing client and vendor relations in Japan, China, India, Singapore, Hong Kong, and Australia. I started at the company as a general international operation rep, but moved up to managing those international client and vendor relations.

Extracurricular: In early 2011 I founded a non-profit organization to help increase community awareness of childhood sexual abuse, and to provide financial assistance to underprivileged victims in need of one-on-one counseling. We have helped several victims and I have had the chance to speak to hundreds of members of the community. I was awarded the Lieutenant Governor's Volunteer Recognition Award in 2011 for my work in the community.

-I have also been a mentor/instructor for Junior Achievement since the beginning of 2013.

-I am also an ambassador for the Trevor Project in my state, and I regularly respond to LGBT teen's questions regarding struggle they are facing in everyday life.

-I am an avid runner and have run in several marathons.

-I served a two-year mission for the LDS church in Japan. For one of those years I was a regional leader and oversaw the work and well-being of 20 to 30 other missionaries.

Post MBA goals: Short-term - To transition from operations in the financial industry into an operations leadership role in the consumer products industry (Ideally a place like Nike).

Long-term - To become of the COO of a global consumer products company and use the business knowledge and experience I have gained to become an influential leader within the community especially with youth related organizations.

Interested in feedback for Tuck, Haas, Kellogg, Sloan, Yale SOM, Darden, and Anderson.

Thanks!
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by Jon@Admissionado » Sun Jun 09, 2013 10:56 pm
With Goldman Sachs on your resume, a lovely GMAT score, the foundation of your non-profit, and your quite interesting personal background, there aint no reason why you shouldn't stick to Top 10 programs.

You have a lot more volunteer experience than most applicants, and your LDS experience is very new. with Goldman Sachs as a feeder firm to the top schools, why settle for everything less.

Of course you will need to nail the essays on the head, and get your bosses to write beautiful recommendations, but they have probably done that before ;)

Good luck to you, and if you have any other questions, let us know!

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