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by kleef3f » Thu Apr 01, 2010 9:17 pm
A decade after initiating the nation's most comprehensive and aggressive antismoking program, per
capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs annually per person to
about 60, a drop more than twice as great as in the nation as a whole.

(A) per capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs annually per
person to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as
(B) annual per capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs to about
60, more than twice as great as that
(C) California's annual per capita consumption of cigarettes declined from over 125 packs per
person to about 60, more than twice as great as the drop
(D) California has seen per capita consumption of cigarettes decline from over 125 packs annually
to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as that
(E) California has seen annual per capita consumption of cigarettes decline from over 125 packs
per person to about 60, more than twice as great as that


Answer D[spoiler][/spoiler]
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by rockeyb » Thu Apr 01, 2010 9:33 pm
kleef3f wrote:A decade after initiating the nation's most comprehensive and aggressive antismoking program, per capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs annually per person to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as in the nation as a whole.

(A) per capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs annually per person to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as
[PER CPITA and PER PERSON is redundant ]
(B) annual per capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs to about 60, more than twice as great as that
[what is "more than twice as great" is not clear , eliminate ]
(C) California's annual per capita consumption of cigarettes declined from over 125 packs per person to about 60, more than twice as great as the drop
[PER CPITA and PER PERSON is redundant ]
(D) California has seen per capita consumption of cigarettes decline from over 125 packs annually to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as that
[the only correct answer]
(E) California has seen annual per capita consumption of cigarettes decline from over 125 packs per person to about 60, more than twice as great as that
[PER CPITA and PER PERSON is redundant ]

Answer D[spoiler][/spoiler]
"Know thyself" and "Nothing in excess"
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by thephoenix » Thu Apr 01, 2010 11:14 pm
kleef3f wrote:A decade after initiating the nation's most comprehensive and aggressive antismoking program, per
capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs annually per person to
about 60, a drop more than twice as great as in the nation as a whole.
Answer D[spoiler][/spoiler]
the phrase before comma needs a subject to be modified after comma
A,B and C lacks a subject
e is wrong as per capita consumption and per person is redundant\
D
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