Analytical Writing Assessment
The following appeared as part of an article reviewing summer camps for children.
Parents, if you need a summer camp for your children look no further than Federville Farms. In a recent survey, Federville Farms ranked first in both overall camper satisfaction and in food quality, and second in the variety of outdoor activities. Federville Farms has been family owned and operated for over forty years, so you have nothing to worry about when it comes to your child's safety, and it employs more Red Cross certified lifeguards than any other camp in the state. If you seek the best camp experience for your children, Federville Farms is the best choice you can make.
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
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The argument presented in support Federville Farms as the best choice for summer camps lacks on certain points. The author mentions recent survey in support for Federville Farms, but the author does not mention anything about how the survey was conducted, who conducted the survey, what was the sample size of the survey conducted, where was the survey conducted & what was demographic of the people surveyed. These things need to be considered while evaluating the survey in question. For e.g., whether all the firms providing summer camps were included in the survey, whether the sample size was large enough to account for more appropriate evaluation, and whether the survey was conducted was a reliable third party having no interest what so ever in any of the firms surveyed. Also no mention of whether children who are the actual campers were part of the survey as they can give first-hand account of the experience.
Further the argument of more Red Cross certified lifeguards than any other camp in the state in terms of child safety would have been stronger if the author had mentioned the ratio of lifeguards to children in the camp. Second there is no mention of what overall camper satisfaction includes. There needs to be more detail about the things included in the survey to correctly evaluate the above argument of Federville Farms being the best camp.[size=0][/size]
The following appeared as part of an article reviewing summer camps for children.
Parents, if you need a summer camp for your children look no further than Federville Farms. In a recent survey, Federville Farms ranked first in both overall camper satisfaction and in food quality, and second in the variety of outdoor activities. Federville Farms has been family owned and operated for over forty years, so you have nothing to worry about when it comes to your child's safety, and it employs more Red Cross certified lifeguards than any other camp in the state. If you seek the best camp experience for your children, Federville Farms is the best choice you can make.
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
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The argument presented in support Federville Farms as the best choice for summer camps lacks on certain points. The author mentions recent survey in support for Federville Farms, but the author does not mention anything about how the survey was conducted, who conducted the survey, what was the sample size of the survey conducted, where was the survey conducted & what was demographic of the people surveyed. These things need to be considered while evaluating the survey in question. For e.g., whether all the firms providing summer camps were included in the survey, whether the sample size was large enough to account for more appropriate evaluation, and whether the survey was conducted was a reliable third party having no interest what so ever in any of the firms surveyed. Also no mention of whether children who are the actual campers were part of the survey as they can give first-hand account of the experience.
Further the argument of more Red Cross certified lifeguards than any other camp in the state in terms of child safety would have been stronger if the author had mentioned the ratio of lifeguards to children in the camp. Second there is no mention of what overall camper satisfaction includes. There needs to be more detail about the things included in the survey to correctly evaluate the above argument of Federville Farms being the best camp.[size=0][/size]
