Please rate my Analysis of an Issue essay

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Please rate my Analysis of an Issue essay

by ymohiuddin » Tue Aug 17, 2010 1:06 pm
Analysis of an Issue

"In any enterprise the process of making or doing something is ultimately more important than the final product."

While there is much to be gained from the creative process in any field, ultimately this experience is almost worthless if it fails to achieve its main goals. No doubt such a process can be used to improve future endeavours, but in the business world, consumers and clients judge concepts and ideas by their final product regardless of the original intention. Therefore, no matter how much one benefits from implementing a particular project or strategy, if the final outcome fails to meet expectations then it is a reflection on a particular flaw in the creative process.

One example that illustrates this point can be found in media. Journalists often struggle to finish stories - especially political and economic stories - because they are unable to reach key sources, or important contacts obstruct their attempts to learn key facts. Despite this difficulty, reporters still manage to produce high quality articles or programs thanks to their skills and ability to extract information in other ways. Thus, the final product is a testament to their ability to work around the inherent roadblocks that cloud their creative process. Ultimately the final product doesn't reflect the hassles they faced trying to get the real story, and readers or viewers don't care what a particular reporter went through in finishing a story, as long as it's worth it.

A second example that backs up the thesis that the final product is more relevent than its process comes from the corporate world. In this sector, the quality of consumer goods and products is guaranteed to make or break a company's reputation and share price. Take, for example, Toyota's troublesome mass recall of 2009-10, which seriously damaged its public image. In this case, the company's final product was a flawed vehicle that endangered consumer lives and in some cases resulted in death. This key fact mattered much more to people and Toyota employees than any particular positive experience gained from the creative process involved in designing and buliding the cars.

In conclusion, as shown in both of the above cases, the final product is what shapes public opinion of a brand, industry or product, and is therefore much more important than the labour and philosophy that went into making it. While one cannot deny the benefits of taking away positive experiences when working on a lengthy and intensive project, if the result is subpar then the creative process itself must be reexamined for any potential drawbacks, as it is responsible for a poor product.
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by crackverbal » Wed Aug 18, 2010 3:39 am
Some areas you should focus on:

1. Give reasons and supplement by examples. In your essays you have just made your point using examples.

2. Some of your sentences tend to be too long and (hence) confusing. Try to break it into smaller sentences. Sample this:
"Ultimately the final product doesn't reflect the hassles they faced trying to get the real story, and readers or viewers don't care what a particular reporter went through in finishing a story, as long as it's worth it."
"While one cannot deny the benefits of taking away positive experiences when working on a lengthy and intensive project, if the result is subpar then the creative process itself must be reexamined for any potential drawbacks, as it is responsible for a poor product."


3. I am not sure if you should be giving the example of Toyota as its too relevant and people might have some emotions involved. Better to give examples which evoke no emotion - like your Uncle Peter's company :O)

Overall I would give it around 4.5

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by ymohiuddin » Wed Aug 18, 2010 4:55 am
Thanks a lot Arun! I have a week to but I still seem to be stuck between the 4-5 range on AoI. Hopefully on test day I'll work a miracle!

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by vedvishwa » Wed Aug 18, 2010 6:40 am
Hi Mohinuddin,

I felt, your flow of thought is good. Just need to break those into pieces as pointed out by Arun. Give more stress on the content and your idea about the topic rather than explaining examples.

All the Best.

P.S: You too can provide your comments about my essays.

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