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vishuyadav
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Q :The following appeared in a memorandum from the business department of the Apogee Company: "When the Apogee Company had all its operations in one location, it was more profitable than it is today. Therefore, the Apogee Company should close down its field offices and conduct all its operations from a single location. Such centralization would improve profitability by cutting costs and helping the company maintain better supervision of all employees."
Essay :
The Author proposes the plan for improving the Apogee Company profit by closing all field offices and does all operation from single location, while we can say the closing the unnecessary field offices will definitely save some cost, but based on only this factor the author missed some other factor to be present in order to be sentence stand valid. Though his claim may well have merit, the author presents a poorly reasoned argument, based on several questionable premises and assumptions, and based solely on the evidence the author offers; we cannot accept his argument as valid
The primary issue with the author's reasoning lies in his unsubstantiated premises. Author not presents the supporting evidence for his premise and not presented the fact that fully support as only cost is the cause for profit decrease. He did not mention about the revenues position.
The author's premises, the basis for his argument, lack any legitimate evidentiary support and render his conclusion unacceptable.
In addition, the author makes several assumptions that remain unproven. As per authors premises and conclusion seems he is assuming the cost is only the factor for decreasing the profit and thinking the revenue won't change so only closing the unnecessary field operation will increase the profit as the revenue will be same. But he fails to mention the any link between unstated assumption and conclusion.
The author weakens his argument by making assumptions and failing to provide explication of the links between revenue and profit he assumes exists.
While the author does have several key issues in his argument's premises and assumptions that are not to say that the entire argument is without base. Yes it is true if the company has the centralized offices it will utilize the resources and monitor in batter way and can reuse the lot of things to reduce cost.
Though there are several issues with the author's reasoning at present, with research and clarification, he could improve his argument significantly.
In sum, the author's illogical argument is based on unsupported premises and unsubstantiated assumptions that render his conclusion invalid. If the author presents the all facts about the revenue, profit, and cost surely he can present the good argument to his reader.
If the author truly hopes to change his readers' minds on the issue, he would have to largely restructure his argument, fix the flaws in his logic, clearly explicate his assumptions, and provide evidentiary support. Without these things, his poorly reasoned argument will likely convince few people.
Could someone from the GMAT instructor/expert community will review/rate and suggest for above essay.thanks in advance
Essay :
The Author proposes the plan for improving the Apogee Company profit by closing all field offices and does all operation from single location, while we can say the closing the unnecessary field offices will definitely save some cost, but based on only this factor the author missed some other factor to be present in order to be sentence stand valid. Though his claim may well have merit, the author presents a poorly reasoned argument, based on several questionable premises and assumptions, and based solely on the evidence the author offers; we cannot accept his argument as valid
The primary issue with the author's reasoning lies in his unsubstantiated premises. Author not presents the supporting evidence for his premise and not presented the fact that fully support as only cost is the cause for profit decrease. He did not mention about the revenues position.
The author's premises, the basis for his argument, lack any legitimate evidentiary support and render his conclusion unacceptable.
In addition, the author makes several assumptions that remain unproven. As per authors premises and conclusion seems he is assuming the cost is only the factor for decreasing the profit and thinking the revenue won't change so only closing the unnecessary field operation will increase the profit as the revenue will be same. But he fails to mention the any link between unstated assumption and conclusion.
The author weakens his argument by making assumptions and failing to provide explication of the links between revenue and profit he assumes exists.
While the author does have several key issues in his argument's premises and assumptions that are not to say that the entire argument is without base. Yes it is true if the company has the centralized offices it will utilize the resources and monitor in batter way and can reuse the lot of things to reduce cost.
Though there are several issues with the author's reasoning at present, with research and clarification, he could improve his argument significantly.
In sum, the author's illogical argument is based on unsupported premises and unsubstantiated assumptions that render his conclusion invalid. If the author presents the all facts about the revenue, profit, and cost surely he can present the good argument to his reader.
If the author truly hopes to change his readers' minds on the issue, he would have to largely restructure his argument, fix the flaws in his logic, clearly explicate his assumptions, and provide evidentiary support. Without these things, his poorly reasoned argument will likely convince few people.
Could someone from the GMAT instructor/expert community will review/rate and suggest for above essay.thanks in advance
Thanks,
Vishuyadav
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