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by hongwang9703 » Thu Jul 22, 2010 10:15 am
"Without new ideas, any society will stagnate. New ideas can only be introduced in a society that permits freedom of expression. Therefore, if a society is to thrive, all limits on freedom of expression should be eliminated."


I agree that without new ideas, society will stagnate to a certain degree. Innovation and new ideas bring excitement and fresh outlook. However to say that if a society is to thrive, all limits on freedom of expression should be eliminated is baseless and unsound.

First of all, the author needs to clarify what is meant by freedom of expression. Does nudity and sexual activities in public consider a freedom of expression? If so, then, should they be permitted? how about what effects will it have on children. How about rape, and murder? some may argue that those are freedom of expression in that the rapist and murderer have a drive to express their internal turmoil by bringing on pain and suffering to others. Should those heinousness be permitted? More importantly, how will permitting those atrocities help introduce new ideas?


To say that new ideas can "only" be introduced in a society that permits freedom of expression needs substantial evidence as well. First of all, what is constitutes a new idea in the author's mind? Perhaps, new inventions and new technology? surly those are sparked by persons' ideas, and they are not only permitted in all societys-all of which have limits on freedom of expression, but thrives the societies forward and improves standards of living.

Or perhaps the author is refering to books as the "new ideas". But new books are a variety of subjects are published everyday in all societies. The freedom of expression need not be eliminated for those books to be published and read by people in the society.

So just exactly what type of ideas can only be introduced in a society that permits freedom of expression? and how will those ideas help a society to thrive?

To summarize, the introdution of books and prevalence of new technology have shown that new ideas can be introduced to societys with freedom of expression, therefore, contradicts the argument. In order to substantiate the author's point, he or she needs to disprove all possibilities of introducing new ideas to societies with freedom of expression, which is almost an impossible task.
Furthurmore, the author needs to have a criteria of what constitutes new ideas and what constitutes freedom of expression. The argument, as it stands, is extremely weak and ambiguous.
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by hongwang9703 » Fri Jul 23, 2010 6:44 pm
this is my first essay, if you could please comment on what i can do to improve!
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by grockit_andrea » Sun Jul 25, 2010 9:02 am
A few notes on your essay: you have a good eye for potential problems with the argument. However, your presentation could be improved. Rhetorical questions are a good tool for pointing out flaws, but if you overuse them (as I think you do here) they become grating. Instead of phrasing the majority of your objections to the argument as questions, try to mix up your writing style a little bit by using sentences to state the problems. For example, you use this question in your second paragraph: "Does nudity and sexual activities in public consider a freedom of expression?" You could rephrase this into a statement by saying, "The author fails to define freedom of expression, and leaves it open to the possibility that things like public nudity and sexual activities could be permitted."
You should also leave some time for editing; your essay has a pattern of flaws in grammar and punctuation (the subject-verb agreement issue in the quoted question above is one example). Cleaning those up before you submit your essay makes you look more professional.
And finally, you might adjust your tone a little; you sound unnecessarily confrontational here. Strive for a constructive, helpful tone. Instead of criticizing the argument as "baseless" and "extremely weak," point out that the argument might have merit but that flaws in its reasoning leave it open to criticism. Your extensive use of rhetorical questions and strong negative references to the argument make it sound a little like you're attacking the author, which is unnecessary.
You have the basis for a good essay in your recognition of weaknesses in the argument; some adjustments to your essay writing will help you get your best score on test day. Best of luck on your continued essay practice!
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by hongwang9703 » Wed Aug 04, 2010 8:52 pm
Thank you very much for your detailed and much appreciated response. I see where my weaknesses lie now and will improve my writing style as well as how the essay comes across.
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