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by pbanavara » Wed Jan 21, 2009 1:00 pm
"The scientist asked for volunteers with allergies but who had not given blood recently."

This is not from any of the GMAT books but something I found on Bartleby.com. There is a malformed sentence .. please point out the errors.

There's no OA for this as it is not from any GMAT books/study material. Just posted for discussion purposes.

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by Hopper39 » Wed Jan 21, 2009 2:35 pm
Can you not just remove the word "but"?

"The scientist asked for volunteers with allergies (X) who had not given blood recently."

I would also move recently in front of the verb - "who had no recently given blood.", but I think both are OK.
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by piyush_nitt » Wed Jan 21, 2009 10:42 pm
Hopper39 wrote:Can you not just remove the word "but"?

"The scientist asked for volunteers with allergies (X) who had not given blood recently."

I would also move recently in front of the verb - "who had no recently given blood.", but I think both are OK.
My take on this is

The scientist asked for volunteers who had not given blood recently with allergies.
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by pbanavara » Wed Jan 21, 2009 11:13 pm
Hopper39 wrote:Can you not just remove the word "but"?

"The scientist asked for volunteers with allergies (X) who had not given blood recently."

I would also move recently in front of the verb - "who had no recently given blood.", but I think both are OK.
Why would you move the verb recently in front of the verb ? any paricular reasons ?
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by keepsmilinyaar » Thu Jan 22, 2009 9:22 am
The scientist asked for volunteers,who had not given blood recently but have allergies.
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by pbanavara » Thu Jan 22, 2009 9:28 am
keepsmilinyaar wrote:The scientist asked for volunteers,who had not given blood recently but have allergies.
This seems right ..but still I think the parallelism would be addressed more eloquently by something like this

"The scientist asked for volunteers who had allergies but had not given blood recently"
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by piyush_nitt » Thu Jan 22, 2009 4:39 pm
pbanavara wrote:
keepsmilinyaar wrote:The scientist asked for volunteers,who had not given blood recently but have allergies.
This seems right ..but still I think the parallelism would be addressed more eloquently by something like this

"The scientist asked for volunteers who had allergies but had not given blood recently"
Do you think who had allergies is correct??

volunteers is plural , we need have here.

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by aroon7 » Sat Jan 24, 2009 10:04 pm
"had allergies" refers to people who had allergies before and not now...
this changes the meaning.

Let me try...
The scientist asked for volunteers, who have allergies and had not given blood recently

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by reachac » Sun Jan 25, 2009 6:19 am
aroon7 wrote:"had allergies" refers to people who had allergies before and not now...
this changes the meaning.

Let me try...
The scientist asked for volunteers, who have allergies and had not given blood recently

:roll:

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'asked' in the sentence is already referring to a past event, hence the sentence needs to maintain the past tense throughout, 'Have' would then be a mismatch. Hope that helps!

As for the sentence
"The scientist asked for volunteers who had allergies but had not given blood recently" is parallel and correct
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