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nicktimoshenko
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Hello
estimate please my essay,
write please, is it problem that essay is very short? (unfortunately i can't write more during 30 min)
Argument
The following was used as part of an internet advertising company's appeal to businesses: Furniture Depot employed our internet advertising company to help. Since then its sales increased by 10% over last year's totals. Furniture Depot's success demonstrates how using our internet services can increase your profitability.
Internet advertising has become a hot topic in United States as of late. There are those who debate that it is very effective and those, who do not agree with this statement.
In preceding statement author claims that using internet advertising helps company to become successful, because its sales increase on 10%. Though this claim may well merit author's poor reasoned argument based on several questionable permissions and assumptions.
Firstly author conclude that sales grow up on 10% as result of internet advertising. But he did not write about another reasons that could cause increase of sales. For example low price of production, marketing action or using another types of advertising. Thus we can not be sure that sales grow up as result of this marketing tools.
Secondary author writes nothing about sales in preceding years. If in preceding years sales growed up with rate of 50% in year, using internet advertising is not successful.
Thirdly author claims that increasing sales increase profitability, but provide no evidence that could prove this conclusion.
Therefore author argument is poor reasoned, and have serious logical flaw. And if author want to improve argument, he ought to provide additional evidence. For example evidence about what kind of advertising company used before lust year, how much money it spent for it, and what profitability it has. After that argument will be more better.
estimate please my essay,
write please, is it problem that essay is very short? (unfortunately i can't write more during 30 min)
Argument
The following was used as part of an internet advertising company's appeal to businesses: Furniture Depot employed our internet advertising company to help. Since then its sales increased by 10% over last year's totals. Furniture Depot's success demonstrates how using our internet services can increase your profitability.
Internet advertising has become a hot topic in United States as of late. There are those who debate that it is very effective and those, who do not agree with this statement.
In preceding statement author claims that using internet advertising helps company to become successful, because its sales increase on 10%. Though this claim may well merit author's poor reasoned argument based on several questionable permissions and assumptions.
Firstly author conclude that sales grow up on 10% as result of internet advertising. But he did not write about another reasons that could cause increase of sales. For example low price of production, marketing action or using another types of advertising. Thus we can not be sure that sales grow up as result of this marketing tools.
Secondary author writes nothing about sales in preceding years. If in preceding years sales growed up with rate of 50% in year, using internet advertising is not successful.
Thirdly author claims that increasing sales increase profitability, but provide no evidence that could prove this conclusion.
Therefore author argument is poor reasoned, and have serious logical flaw. And if author want to improve argument, he ought to provide additional evidence. For example evidence about what kind of advertising company used before lust year, how much money it spent for it, and what profitability it has. After that argument will be more better.
