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Analysis of an issue:
"Formal educational credentials should be the most important factor in hiring employees."

The author states that formal educational credentials are the most important factor in hiring employees. To some extent, I do agree with the above statement, however, I do not agree that it is the most important factor. There are many other factors that play an essential role like prior work experience, extra cirricular activities etc.
When a company is looking to hire a person, they want to make sure they hire the best person for the job. There are many intelligent and smart individuals who are well deserving, but may not have excellent educational credentials, due to factors such as involvement in extra cirriculars in school, lack of time due to family commitments etc. However, these individuals are very well read and hence could be a great asset to an organization. Therefore, hiring solely based on a persons formal educational credentials will not help companies when it comes to these intelligent individuals.
In addition, a persons prior work experience is an important consideration in order to determine if the person is fit to do the job. His skills and various projects from his previous work can be a good indicator on his ability to perform the current job.
Also, personal recommendations from reliable sources, like former boss and colleagues, would be immensely helpful in getting a good sense of the persons skills, communication habits and overall work ethic.
In conclusion, while I do think formal educational credentials are important in hiring employees, especially if it is a highly technical or specialised field, I think employers should also look at all aspects of a potential employee, in order to determine the best person for the job.
Source: — GMAT Essays (AWA) |

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by myohmy » Sun Jun 21, 2009 1:04 pm
I would give you a 3. Your primary issue is that your essay has no real world examples. This is CRUCIAL for getting a good score on the GMAT. Real world examples can come from history, current events, politics, etc, but they *need* to be there. There's probably no way to achieve a good score without them.

Sit down and write out a list of 3-4 real world examples that have a lot of facets and could be applied to many issue essay prompts. For instance, you could cite the current Wall Street melt down for this essay and the claims of some that the top business schools many of these IBers came from did not give them adequate risk-assessment skills or forethought. Etc., etc.

Your thesis is well stated, but should come at the end of your first paragraph. I like that you agreed to a certain extent and then disagreed - it shows that you realize the issue is nuanced. However, there are too many generalities and hypothetical situations in your essay. You've also got a couple spelling/grammar issues, so make sure to leave five minutes at the end to proofread.

Good luck on your test!

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by tttggg » Mon Jun 22, 2009 6:48 am
first of all, all the very best for exam. I suppose there is still 2 days left for ur xam. See, I am writing this reply just to make you aware of the mistake u did in the very opening sentences of ur essay. the issue here is given to you as " formal educational credentials are the most important factor in hiring employees" and you are saying in your essay that "To some extent, I do agree with the above statement, however, I do not agree that it is the most important factor" you see your mistake? how can you say to some extent it is the most important factor..either it is or it isn't. You should have stated clearly that I disagree with the author as it is one of the factors but not the most important one. Otherwise your opening looks very weak.

rest of the feedback you have already recieved. gud luck :)

cheers

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by tamina1 » Tue Jun 23, 2009 11:59 am
Thank you!!

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