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by chaya009 » Wed Jan 27, 2010 6:33 pm
Experts believe that senior citizens with higher than average cholesterol and their families develop a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases are more likely to die at an age below that of their life expectancy.
A. same.
B. whose families have a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases
C. and a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases runs in the family.
D. whose families have a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases running in them
E. with a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases running in the family.

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by prinit » Wed Jan 27, 2010 6:44 pm
chaya009 wrote:Experts believe that senior citizens with higher than average cholesterol and their families develop a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases are more likely to die at an age below that of their life expectancy.
A. same.
B. whose families have a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases
C. and a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases runs in the family.
D. whose families have a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases running in them
E. with a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases running in the family.

OA later
My Pick would be E. >> parallelism and unnecessary modifiers are not present.
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by chaya009 » Wed Jan 27, 2010 6:56 pm
Even i picked E, but it is not correct.
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by money9111 » Wed Jan 27, 2010 7:21 pm
I chose B... Experts believe that senior citizens whose families have a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases are more likely...

that was my rationale
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by chaya009 » Wed Jan 27, 2010 9:07 pm
OA is B,

can you please explain why E is wrong.
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by mmslf75 » Wed Jan 27, 2010 9:16 pm
chaya009 wrote:OA is B,

can you please explain why E is wrong.
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Experts believe that senior citizens with higher than average cholesterol with a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases running in the family are more likely to die at an age below that of their life expectancy.

E. with a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases running in the family.

When option E is present in the underlined part, it means as though

EXPERTS BELIEVE... WITH A PREDISPOSITION...

WITH presence makes the sentence nonsensical
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by becnil » Wed Jan 27, 2010 9:31 pm
My share of thought:

The use of "whose families" after "average cholesterol" seemed ambiguous to me, thats why I chose E.
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by chaya009 » Wed Jan 27, 2010 10:07 pm
The source is Manhattan review.
Thanks for the explanation.
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by gmattarget700 » Wed Jan 27, 2010 10:48 pm
E could be right if we add "and"

Experts believe that senior citizens with higher than average cholesterol AND with a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases running in the family are more likely to die at an age below that of their life expectancy.

without "AND" the sentence seems not connecting...in the presence of two "with"


experts, do you agree with above?
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by money9111 » Thu Jan 28, 2010 2:13 am
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by gmattarget700 » Sat Jan 30, 2010 12:45 pm
experts,

seeking some comments on my last post....thanks
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by soumyopriyosaha » Sat Jan 30, 2010 11:07 pm
chaya009 wrote:Experts believe that senior citizens with higher than average cholesterol and their families develop a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases are more likely to die at an age below that of their life expectancy.
A. same.
B. whose families have a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases
C. and a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases runs in the family.
D. whose families have a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases running in them
E. with a predisposition to cardiovascular diseases running in the family.

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IMO B.
IN B whose refers to senior citizens correctly and it is the most concise answer.
The problem that I think with E is the use of "with" might refer back to average cholesterol which will render the sentence useless.
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