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by karthikpandian19 » Mon Jun 18, 2012 11:35 pm
John Cage, whose musical experiments with chance theory influenced Merce Cunningham's dance choreography, became famous as much because of having a philosophical writing style as for having eagerly contributed to the development of modern dance.


(A) famous as much because of having a philosophical writing style as for having eagerly contributed to the development of modern dance

(B) famous as much for having a philosophical writing style as for his eager contributions to the development of modern dance

(C) as famous for his philosophical writing style as for his eager contributions to the development of modern dance

(D) famous as much because of his philosophical writing style as he was for his eager contributions to the development of modern dance

(E) as famous for having a philosophical writing style as having eagerly contributed to the development of modern dance
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by shekhar.kataria » Tue Jun 19, 2012 12:08 am
karthikpandian19 wrote:John Cage, whose musical experiments with chance theory influenced Merce Cunningham's dance choreography, became famous as much because of having a philosophical writing style as for having eagerly contributed to the development of modern dance.


(A) famous as much because of having a philosophical writing style as for having eagerly contributed to the development of modern dance

(B) famous as much for having a philosophical writing style as for his eager contributions to the development of modern dance

(C) as famous for his philosophical writing style as for his eager contributions to the development of modern dance Change in meaning.

(D) famous as much because of his philosophical writing style as he was for his eager contributions to the development of modern dance

(E) as famous for having a philosophical writing style as ( should have a for her ) having eagerly contributed to the development of modern dance
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by abcgmat » Tue Jun 19, 2012 12:29 am
John Cage, whose musical experiments with chance theory influenced Merce Cunningham's dance choreography, became famous as much because of having a philosophical writing style as for having eagerly contributed to the development of modern dance.
(A) famous as much because of having a philosophical writing style as for having eagerly contributed to the development of modern dance
(B) famous as much for having a philosophical writing style as for his eager contributions to the development of modern dance
(C) as famous for his philosophical writing style as for his eager contributions to the development of modern dance
(D) famous as much because of his philosophical writing style as he was for his eager contributions to the development of modern dance
(E) as famous for having a philosophical writing style as having eagerly contributed to the development of modern dance

The sentence intends to say that he became famous for X and Y , and both X and Y are of same priority
The options are more about parallelism. As much X as Y

A: as much because of having .....as for having - Not parallell
B: famous as much for having a as for his eager contributions - Having is not parallel to contributions
C: as famous for ...as for his - wait
D: as much because ...as he was - no because in the second part
E: as famous for having ....as having - wait
as X...as Y (x and Y needs to be parallel)
C looks fine and is better than E as C uses Nouns than Ing forms of nouns. Having is not not required .

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by karthikpandian19 » Tue Jun 19, 2012 12:38 am
OA is C
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by henryjejo » Fri Sep 21, 2012 12:14 am
Hi All,

Could you please help to clarify....


(B) famous as much for having a philosophical writing style as for his eager contributions to the development of modern dance

The structure is "Famous as much for X...as for Y". The format appears correct, though there is an apparent parallelism issue with X and Y.

(C) as famous for his philosophical writing style as for his eager contributions to the development of modern dance Change in meaning.

The structure is "As famous for X...as for his Y". Ignoring, the prepositional phrases X an Y, the sentence seems to read "As Famous as eager contributions"....it does not seem to be correct.

Please provide your inputs...is the construction stated in "c" correct?

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by karthikpandian19 » Fri Sep 21, 2012 1:13 am
Henry,

(B) famous as much for having a philosophical writing style as for his eager contributions to the development of modern dance

here, "having a ...." is wordy and should be "his .....", that is one of the error for which we can reject B. For this reason it is not parallel

(C) as famous for his philosophical writing style as for his eager contributions to the development of modern dance

The highlighted blue portions are satisfying the idiom construction - "As X as Y"


henryjejo wrote:Hi All,

Could you please help to clarify....


(B) famous as much for having a philosophical writing style as for his eager contributions to the development of modern dance

The structure is "Famous as much for X...as for Y". The format appears correct, though there is an apparent parallelism issue with X and Y.

(C) as famous for his philosophical writing style as for his eager contributions to the development of modern dance Change in meaning.

The structure is "As famous for X...as for his Y". Ignoring, the prepositional phrases X an Y, the sentence seems to read "As Famous as eager contributions"....it does not seem to be correct.

Please provide your inputs...is the construction stated in "c" correct?

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by henryjejo » Fri Sep 21, 2012 4:54 pm
Thanks Karthik...Got it. Not sure why I thought we should ignore the prepositions in X and Y. Too much of SCs!!

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