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by frank1 » Sun Sep 19, 2010 9:52 pm
Well these are questions suppose to be made by an instructor and suppose to be as per GMAT standard

There are many but I dont quite agree with these
(as it is general,pardon me for posting all in once)

1)Carrying the hot water across the lane to melt the ice on the bird bath,the sparrows were gathered in the groups a few feet away
My choice:
bird bath,the groups of sparrow were gathering
OA
bird bath,i saw groups of sparrows gathered

Can we inject I in that way ...and it is passive as well


2)Like the hills that are found in Australia,the hills of USA
OA
Like those in Australia,the hills of USA

Isn't that 'those' a dangling modifier....what does that 'those refer to...
those can be house...any thing


3)Except for one class in sociology and on in humanities,all the student's graduation requirements have been fulfilled.
OA.
Except for one class in sociology and on in humanities,the student has fulfilled all of his graduation requirements

How can his.....that means only male students which changes the meaning of original sentence

4)The audience for the opera,an inventive rendition of Wagner's Tisolse,was clearly entharalled by the show for the attendees paused for some moments before applauding vigoursly at its conclusion
OA:A
ok audience is collective noun ie singular but doesnt this sentence gives the meaning that 'audience' and 'attendees' were two different thing...
even so ,as attendees applauded so audience was entharalled is illogical

5)Harry's "The Four seasons" remains among the most popular pieces of modern music;few people relaize that he wrote sonnets to accompany each of the four concertos.
OA:A
My choice:modern music but few people
whats problem in that
the sentence tends to show that contradiction



Please comment on these and help...
These were only (so called) mistakes i made in that set and i think these actually are not errors....

Please comment
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by Tani » Mon Sep 20, 2010 6:21 am
Question 1: Your version would mean the sparrows were carrying the hot water across the lane - not likely. An introductory phrase modifies the noun immediately following.

Question 2: In this sentence "those" clearly refers to hills. Not a problem. "like the hills that are found in Australia" is awkward and overly long.

Question 3: "His" does not change the meaning. "He" is the student under discussion. "Student's" is singular. "Students' " would be the plural. The preferred version also avoids the passive tense.

Question 4: There are a couple of typos in this one and I'm not sure what the original was or what the alternatives were.

Question 5: Again I don't understand the sentence because of typos. "honnet" is not a word.
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by frank1 » Mon Sep 20, 2010 8:53 am
Tani Wolff - Kaplan wrote:
Question 2: In this sentence "those" clearly refers to hills. Not a problem. "like the hills that are found in Australia" is awkward and overly long.

Question 3: "His" does not change the meaning. "He" is the student under discussion. "Student's" is singular. "Students' " would be the plural. The preferred version also avoids the passive tense.
well thanks....really thanks

any way in number 1 i thought injecting 'I' out of no where would be wrong.We can inject any thing then.Any ways it seems i am wrong.

2)I think i need to re-read dangling modifiers

3)My perceiption ...it talks about student in general (which includes boys and girls...) and corrected version only talks about boys(his) so i thought it was wrong ...girls are lost there which i feel changes the meaning....any way seems like i was wrong.

4-5) sentence changed

any way thanks.
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by Tani » Mon Sep 20, 2010 8:42 pm
The issue in #1 is grammar, not fact. If the answer had said "Harry saw groups of sparrows..." that would have been correct as well. The version with "I" is the only one that is grammatically correct.

#3 does not talk about "students", it talks about a single student, therefore it would be correct if it referred to either "his" or "her" graduation requirements.

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