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by GMATMadeEasy » Sun Oct 31, 2010 6:04 am
Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives, capitalized on her keen observation and love of the natural world.

A. Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives,
B. In her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
C. In her book illustrations, which she carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
D. Carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations
E. Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinated them with her narratives and

OA is C

My question is for answer choice B -> How these two modifiers "1. in her book illustrations 2. carefully coordinating them with her narratives" should be interpreted ?


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by Jim@Grockit » Mon Nov 01, 2010 8:20 pm
GMATMadeEasy wrote:Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives, capitalized on her keen observation and love of the natural world.

A. Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives,
B. In her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
C. In her book illustrations, which she carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
D. Carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations
E. Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinated them with her narratives and

OA is C

My question is for answer choice B -> How these two modifiers "1. in her book illustrations 2. carefully coordinating them with her narratives" should be interpreted ?


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"In her book illustrations" is providing additional detail about how she capitalized on her keen observations. "Carefully coordinating them " modifies Beatrix Potter (she is the one who was coordinating), but the "them" is a problem. It's awkward and quite possibly wrong to use a pronoun in one non-relative-clause modifying phrase to refer to a noun in another such phrase: "With the pizzas, eating them in a hurry, the students made up for a 24-hour fast."
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by EducationAisle » Tue Nov 02, 2010 6:15 am
carefully coordinating them with her narratives modifies book illustrations. This doesn't make sense since Beatrix Potter, not the illustrations, actually co-ordinated.
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