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Dear Members,
My attempt at AOA below. Please share your feedback.
Argument:
"The construction last year of a shopping mall in downtown Oak City was a mistake. Since the mall has opened, a number of local business have closed, the downtown area suffers from an acute parking shortage, and arrests for crime and vagrancy have increased in the nearby Oak City Park. Elm City should pay attention to the example of Oak City mall and deny the application to build a shopping mall in Elm City."
Analysis:
In this fast advancing world, world cities and businesses are growing at the speed of light and retail infrastructure in terms of big malls are expanding. Malls play a big role in modern life. There are those who support the presence of these big malls, as the malls offers 'all' in place and at a cheaper rater. There are others who are against the development and expansion of malls as they feel that the malls play a negative role in society. The newspaper editorial comes in the 'others' category. Though the editorial may have merits, its argument is weak as it is based on unsubstantiated premises and flawed assumptions. Based solely on the evidence the editorial offers, we need to reject the position that the editorial has taken.
The primary issue with the editorial lies in its unsubstantiated premises. The editorial claims that the local businesses have closed due to the opening of the mall and that the downtown area suffers from acute parking shortage due to the presence of the mall. However, the editorial does not offer any evidence which links the presence of the mall with the closure of the businesses and the shortage of parking space in the downtown area. The editorial's premises,the basis for its argument,lacks any legitimate evidentiary support and renders its conclusion unacceptable.
In addition, the editorial makes several questionable assumptions. The editorial assumes that the crime and vagrancy have increased in the Oak City Park due to the presence of the mall.Again, no evidence has been provided to support the same. It is possible that the crime and vagrancy have increased due to decline in police force in the Oak City Park. The editorial's argument is weakened by assumptions that do not provide any link to the conclusion. Even if the current state of Oak City mall is responsible for the crime and parking shortage, it is no reason to block the application to build a new shopping mall in Elm City. The conditions in one city cannot be linked with conditions in another city.
Though the editorial's reasoning and assumptions are weak and flawed, we cannot rule out that the argument is without base. The editorial could strengthen its conclusion if it backs up the premises and assumptions with evidentiary support. If we can prove that the mall does not have sufficient parking space to support the population visiting the mall and that the crime and vagrnacy have increased only due to the presence of the mall and not due to any other factors then the conclusion will be strengthened. Also, the argument should provide evidence as to how the mall has affected the local businesses negatively instead of the current blank statement.Though there are several issues with the editorial's argument, with research and analysis,the argument can be strengthed.
In sum,the editorial's argument is based on illogical assumptions and unsubstantiated premises. The editorial needs to fix the flaws in its reasoning and provide evidentiary support for us its argument. The editorial's current positioning,based on questionable premises and assumptions, renders its conclusion unacceptable.
My attempt at AOA below. Please share your feedback.
Argument:
"The construction last year of a shopping mall in downtown Oak City was a mistake. Since the mall has opened, a number of local business have closed, the downtown area suffers from an acute parking shortage, and arrests for crime and vagrancy have increased in the nearby Oak City Park. Elm City should pay attention to the example of Oak City mall and deny the application to build a shopping mall in Elm City."
Analysis:
In this fast advancing world, world cities and businesses are growing at the speed of light and retail infrastructure in terms of big malls are expanding. Malls play a big role in modern life. There are those who support the presence of these big malls, as the malls offers 'all' in place and at a cheaper rater. There are others who are against the development and expansion of malls as they feel that the malls play a negative role in society. The newspaper editorial comes in the 'others' category. Though the editorial may have merits, its argument is weak as it is based on unsubstantiated premises and flawed assumptions. Based solely on the evidence the editorial offers, we need to reject the position that the editorial has taken.
The primary issue with the editorial lies in its unsubstantiated premises. The editorial claims that the local businesses have closed due to the opening of the mall and that the downtown area suffers from acute parking shortage due to the presence of the mall. However, the editorial does not offer any evidence which links the presence of the mall with the closure of the businesses and the shortage of parking space in the downtown area. The editorial's premises,the basis for its argument,lacks any legitimate evidentiary support and renders its conclusion unacceptable.
In addition, the editorial makes several questionable assumptions. The editorial assumes that the crime and vagrancy have increased in the Oak City Park due to the presence of the mall.Again, no evidence has been provided to support the same. It is possible that the crime and vagrancy have increased due to decline in police force in the Oak City Park. The editorial's argument is weakened by assumptions that do not provide any link to the conclusion. Even if the current state of Oak City mall is responsible for the crime and parking shortage, it is no reason to block the application to build a new shopping mall in Elm City. The conditions in one city cannot be linked with conditions in another city.
Though the editorial's reasoning and assumptions are weak and flawed, we cannot rule out that the argument is without base. The editorial could strengthen its conclusion if it backs up the premises and assumptions with evidentiary support. If we can prove that the mall does not have sufficient parking space to support the population visiting the mall and that the crime and vagrnacy have increased only due to the presence of the mall and not due to any other factors then the conclusion will be strengthened. Also, the argument should provide evidence as to how the mall has affected the local businesses negatively instead of the current blank statement.Though there are several issues with the editorial's argument, with research and analysis,the argument can be strengthed.
In sum,the editorial's argument is based on illogical assumptions and unsubstantiated premises. The editorial needs to fix the flaws in its reasoning and provide evidentiary support for us its argument. The editorial's current positioning,based on questionable premises and assumptions, renders its conclusion unacceptable.
