BREAKING: Target Test Prep releases Brand New 2026 On Demand GMAT prep course

Redeem
TTP OnDemand GMAT Video Course
Featured Course

Target Test Prep GMAT OnDemand

Scott Woodbury-Stewart’s private virtual classroom — 400 hours of master-class video lessons for the GMAT Focus Edition.

  • 715+ score guarantee — highest in the industry (99th percentile)
  • 52 chapters · 1,500+ lessons · 4,000+ practice questions
  • 400 hours of video · 1,500+ instructor-led HD smartboard lessons
  • 300,000+ students accepted to Harvard, Stanford, Wharton, Booth & Sloan & more
  • 24/7 live support + weekly Zoom office hours with GMAT instructors
  • TTP AI Assist — 24/7 AI-powered virtual tutor for instant help
  • 1,200+ flashcards + AI-powered study assistant & daily calendar
  • OnDemand, LiveTeach & GMAT Bootcamp formats available
  • Also: GRE, SAT Math & Executive Assessment courses
  • MBA Admissions Consulting now available
  • 🏆 2025 EdTech Breakthrough Award: Test Prep Solution Provider of the Year
  • 200,000+ students served
  • 5-day free trial — $0 to start, no auto-billing, cancel anytime
★★★★★ 5.0 (559 reviews)
130-pt guarantee
$0 to start then $127/mo
Start Free 5-Day Trial Read 559 Reviews →

By providing such services as mortgages

Expert replies
Post new topic Locked
Previous Topic Next Topic
Master | Next Rank: 500 Posts
Posts: 274
Joined: Fri Sep 18, 2015 10:58 pmFollowed by: 1 member
Thanked: 12 times
GMAT Score:530
by vishalwin » Thu Oct 08, 2015 12:55 pm
By providing such services as mortgages, home improvement loans, automobile loans, financial advice, and staying within the metropolitan areas, Acme Bank has become one of the most profitable savings banks in the nation.

A- financial advice, and staying
B- financial advice, and by staying
C- and financial advice, staying
D- and financial advice, and staying
E- and financial advice, and by staying


No clue here. I am very confused how to eliminate. Please help!
Top
Join the discussion
Log in to postLogin with Googleuse password
QUOTE IN REPLY
Source: — Sentence Correction |
Newbie | Next Rank: 10 Posts
Posts: 6
Joined: Sun Sep 27, 2015 7:22 am
GMAT Score:790

by aorrick » Thu Oct 08, 2015 8:11 pm
The bank is doing 2 things, providing services and staying. They are providing 4 services, thus you have a list "mortgages, loans, loans, and financial advice...." Can't be A or B. You need the and between the two things they do, namely providing and staying. Can't be C. Do you need the "by" or not? Yes, it's a parallelism, "By providing and by staying". The answer is E.
Top
Join the discussion
Log in to postLogin with Googleuse password
QUOTE IN REPLY
User avatar
Legendary Member
Posts: 2135
Joined: Mon Feb 03, 2014 9:26 amFollowed by: 140 members
Location: https://martymurraycoaching.com/
Thanked: 955 times
GMAT Score:800

by MartyMurray » Thu Oct 08, 2015 10:18 pm
vishalwin wrote:No clue here. I am very confused how to eliminate. Please help!
Look at what the sentence is conveying.

Acme Bank is providing services including mortgages, home improvement loans, automobile loans, and financial advice. However the list reads as if one of the services they are providing is staying within the metropolitan areas.

Here's an example of a similar error.

Please leave a message including your name, your number, and tell us why you called.

If your name and your number were left out, that sentence would become the following, which clearly does not make sense.

Please leave a message including tell us why you called.

One way to make the sentence make sense is to break up the list in the following way.

Please leave a message including your name and your number, and tell us why you called.

Alternatively the list could be made parallel.

Please leave a message including your name, your number, and the reason why you called.

The list in the question you posted needs to be broken up, because staying within the metropolitan areas is not really part of the list. What's really going on is that Acme bank is providing services and Acme bank is staying within the metropolitan areas.

So the sentence needs to be something like the following. The words I added are in boldface.

By providing such services as mortgages, home improvement loans, automobile loans, and financial advice, and by staying within the metropolitan areas, Acme Bank has become one of the most profitable savings banks in the nation.
Marty Murray
Perfect Scoring Tutor With Over a Decade of Experience
MartyMurrayCoaching.com
Contact me at [email protected] for a free consultation.
Top
Join the discussion
Log in to postLogin with Googleuse password
QUOTE IN REPLY
Post new topic Locked
• Page 1 of 1