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ansh.kumar: Master | Next Rank: 500 Posts; Posts: 108; Joined: Thu Feb 12, 2009 8:20 am; Thanked: 2 times

by ansh.kumar » Fri Feb 19, 2010 4:13 am

180. Bluegrass musician Bill Monroe, whose repertory, views on musical collaboration, and vocal style were influential on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from his own.
(A) were influential on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from
(B) influenced generations of bluegrass artists, also inspired many musicians, including Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from
(C) was influential to generations of bluegrass artists, was also inspirational to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music was different significantly in comparison to
(D) was influential to generations of bluegrass artists, also inspired many musicians, who included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, the music of whom differed significantly when compared to
(E) were an influence on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, including Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music was significantly different from that of
Doesnt *B* look like a run on sentence

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by prinit » Fri Feb 19, 2010 4:29 am

ansh.kumar wrote:180. Bluegrass musician Bill Monroe, whose repertory, views on musical collaboration, and vocal style were influential on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from his own.
(A) were influential on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from
(B) influenced generations of bluegrass artists, also inspired many musicians, including Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from
(C) was influential to generations of bluegrass artists, was also inspirational to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music was different significantly in comparison to
(D) was influential to generations of bluegrass artists, also inspired many musicians, who included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, the music of whom differed significantly when compared to
(E) were an influence on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, including Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music was significantly different from that of
Doesnt *B* look like a run on sentence

My pick is B. Parallel construction and modifiers well placed.

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by vijay_venky » Fri Feb 19, 2010 4:55 am

Bluegrass musician Bill Monroe,<whose repertory, views on musical collaboration, and vocal style influenced generations of bluegrass artists>, also inspired many musicians, including Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from his own.

This is not a run on sentence, once fragmented the sentence is
Bluegrass musician Bill Monroe also inspired many musicians, including Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from his own.

This is a valid construction.

Hope this helps.

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by nileshdalvi » Fri Feb 19, 2010 6:06 am

Please make a habit of underlining the part of the sentence under question. It is very irritating to look at complete sentences which are not underlined and to chosse the part from answer option A. And sometimes the answer option A is left blank and since there is no underline, one has to find the underlined part from the other 4 answer choices. This becomes a time-consuming affair. Then there is no sense in having a clock there.

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by thephoenix » Fri Feb 19, 2010 7:44 am

ansh.kumar wrote:180. Bluegrass musician Bill Monroe, whose repertory, views on musical collaboration, and vocal style were influential on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from his own.
(A) were influential on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from
(B) influenced generations of bluegrass artists, also inspired many musicians, including Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from
(C) was influential to generations of bluegrass artists, was also inspirational to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music was different significantly in comparison to
(D) was influential to generations of bluegrass artists, also inspired many musicians, who included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, the music of whom differed significantly when compared to
(E) were an influence on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, including Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music was significantly different from that of
Doesnt *B* look like a run on sentence

B is definitely the best among the rest as in option A and E were makes the s/c passive and in E there is a sub verb error in the clause .....was ( is used for singular sub)also an inspiration to many musicians

C and D are wrng for sub verb agreement error

now B is not a run on s/c as comma and conjuction also is properly used

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by sharkin » Thu Aug 12, 2010 3:28 am

Can somebody plz comment on the impact (in selecting correct ans) of following:

"that included" in (A), (C)
"including" in (B), (E)
"who included" in (D)

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by blaster » Thu Aug 12, 2010 3:50 am

nileshdalvi wrote:Please make a habit of underlining the part of the sentence under question. It is very irritating to look at complete sentences which are not underlined and to chosse the part from answer option A. And sometimes the answer option A is left blank and since there is no underline, one has to find the underlined part from the other 4 answer choices. This becomes a time-consuming affair. Then there is no sense in having a clock there.

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