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Topic : The effectiveness of country's leader is best measured by examining the well being of that country's citizen

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take.In developing and supporting your position ,you should consider ways in which statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

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Country's citizen well being can be measured by effectiveness of its leader as folowing:By its sound policis to eliminate unemployment ,control on inflation and disaster management schemes,it can also be measured by considering safty norms and good laws,astute judgment and his take on planing and developing rural to urban infrastructure.

At first ,the leaders way of leading the country have major effect on its citizens in allround aspect,which may include citizens life style,health comditions,patronism and e.t.c.For example, a good policies such as reduction in FDI(forign direct investment) so that local retailers don not get exploited and a balance approch is maintain between marts and locals;poeple can go to place whichever seems convinient to them.A good leader thus take into consideration to these ;people won't get unemployed and inflanation rates also remains low by proper schemes and policies of taxes e.t.c ,However when natural disaster happen ,like floods,dought E.t.c ,leader is helpless in controling inflation ,but leaders astute judgment and decision making ablilty can give proper measure in managing disaster and rebuilding infrastructure

A leader effect on its citizen can also be determine by considering the proper safty norms and laws for its citizens and country.Its is seen that people tend to inclined more to places where crime rate are lower or nill,its obvious fact poeple like to live where they get proper justice and won't face any persecutions and crimes;there laws are such that ,the criminal thinks 100 times before commiting any crime,people get paramount safty.For example a women can not walk or travel alone in night where the crime is high and criminal roam without any fear like in places of Delhi ,but in places like other parts of world like America woment can walk anytime of day because there are very low rate of crime.

Citizens well being can also be seen by conditions in which they live ,the housing,the infrastructure,the medical policies,proper resources.Consider a guy living in urban area he get all sort of resources and comfert ,there is continous power supply,sound sewage system,marts and shops for daily needing comodities,work place industries offices which provide higher employment,police stations-safty is maintained,night clubs,restruants amusment parks for enjoyment ,on the other hand a rural condition provide no or very less such things ,people often have to travel long to get to mart,However as far as polution,peace,crowed and relaxed culture is concern rural area have its own advantage here,but it does not contribute to all sort of pleasure and happy life.

A leader who provide all there infrastructure and urban planing is definetly have effect on its citizens well being. To conclude it,a leader who have astute and define thinking ,skills to manage disaster and provide its measure can control inflation and put proper policies and laws ,have better and sound urban planing and developing attitude,is,definetly have effect on its citizens well bieng, citizen feel happy and safe in his regime.
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by tarun036 » Thu Jul 17, 2014 12:00 am
experts ,critic it please,it won't going to take much of your time
thank-you

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