Argument essay template, if anyone wants it

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by ateethdatt » Sun Apr 10, 2011 6:05 am
Thanks a ton myhomy!! I touched AWA only the evening before my GMAT.. and I got a perfect 6 !
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by ruplun » Fri Apr 15, 2011 11:43 pm
@myohm -Please can u provide an argument essay ...

It would be very grateful if anyone can post any argument essays which have a score of 6.

Thanks in advance...

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by er.manas » Wed May 04, 2011 9:08 am
Thanks for the template its quite informative!!!!

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by sivaelectric » Sat May 28, 2011 5:19 am
Thanks for the awesome post :)
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by rjank » Sat May 28, 2011 10:38 am
Reporting another 6.0 with the use of this template. IIRC I did combine the last two paragraphs on at least one if not both of the essays, though.

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by abidshariff » Sat May 28, 2011 9:34 pm
Hi @myohm,

I was searching for the ways to construct a well organized essay, and I found out this template. Below is an analysis of argument essay.(completely based on your template)

Can anyone out there help me where I would stand in Gmat with an organization like this.


When the Apogee Company had all its operations in one location, it was more profitable than it is today. Therefore, the Apogee Company should close down its field offices and conduct all its operations from a single location. Such centralization would improve profitability by cutting costs and helping the company maintain better supervision of all employees.

The author, in the preceding statement claims that the Apogee Company will be more profitable if it centralizes its operations. Though his claim may well have merit, the author presents a poorly reasoned argument, based on several questionable premises and assumptions, and based solely on the evidence the author offers, we cannot accept his argument as valid.

The primary issue with the author's reasoning lies in his unsubstantiated premises. The author claims that centralization will improve profitability by cutting costs. This claim pretty much lacks evidentiary support. He doesn't give any figures by which the company was able to cut the costs by centralization, nor does he provide any substantial evidence to make his point. The author also
claims that centralization will help the company maintain better supervision of all employees, but he again fails to give proper evidence to prove his claim. The company, by centralizing its operations, is as likely to have a poor supervision of the employees as to have a good supervision. The lack of evidence makes us choose our own way of interpreting the argument. So the author's premises, the basis for his argument, lack any legitimate evidentiary support and render his conclusion unacceptable.

In addition, the author makes several assumptions that remain unproven. Citing out that the Apogee Company was more profitable when it had all its operations in one location, the author assumes that the profitability was due to centralization. What if the profitability is not due to the
Centralization but due to the more advertising of the company in that location. He also assumes
that centalization will help the company maintain better supervision of all employees but what if, the company coud not organize properly due to the cluster of operations and employees in a single location.The author weakens his argument by making assumptions and failing to provide expication of the links between centralization and profitabilty he assumes exists.

While the author does have several key issues in his argument's premises and assumptions, that is not to say that the entire argument is without base. A reader could evalute the argument beteer if there are substantial evidences of author's premises and assumptions. The author could strengthen his argument by giving figues by which the company was able to cut down the costs by centralizing its operations. He could support his claim that centralization will improve profitability by giving proper reason of how the supervision of the employees is maintained better by centralization.He could make his point if he could prove that the profitablity is due to the centralization and not due to any other factors.Though there are several issues with the author's reasoning at present, with research and clarification, he could improve his argument significantly.

In sum, as the author leaves out several of key issues, the argument is not sound and persuasive.
If the author truly hopes to change his readers' minds on the issue, he would have to largely restructure his argument, fix the flaws in his logic, clearly explicate his assumptions, and provide evidentiary support. Without these things, his poorly reasoned argument will likely convince few people.

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by j6tran » Wed Jun 01, 2011 2:57 pm
i also scored a 6 using this wonderful template!!! i was pleasantly surprised, as i practiced only one of each awa essay, two days before the test. wow. i really give credit to this amazing template. i don't know where i would be without it, seeing that i've only ever written informal emails after graduating from college over three years ago. haha yay! thanks so much myohm!

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by sivaelectric » Wed Jun 01, 2011 7:09 pm
I need guidance on what materials to read for the AWA. Can someone please let me know how the essays are rated. I have heard college students are sometimes asked to rate the exam and then it goes for computer evaluation. I would like to know whether the depth of information is also important or only the grammatical setup of the essay is evaluated. If you need have better knowledge on subjects what kind of things can you read? :)
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by aftableo2006 » Thu Jun 02, 2011 7:08 am
this is one of the best posts ive come across thankx a lot

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by sandeep800 » Sat Jun 04, 2011 9:00 pm
Thanx a lot..very Useful
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by ibnbatuta » Mon Jun 06, 2011 4:11 am
I am surely gonna use your template for my gmat essays..

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by irock » Tue Jun 07, 2011 11:01 pm
@myohmy: thanks for the template. its great :)
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by ranjithreddy.k9 » Mon Jun 27, 2011 4:06 pm
@myohmy : Thanks a ton for such a awesome post..

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by dubinsky » Wed Jul 13, 2011 1:27 am
@myohmy--

I just got my official test score like 7min ago!!!
And The first place I decided to go was to this forum....
Thank You I got a perfect 6!!!
And writing is not really my thing!!
I think you shud charge ppl for this template... Its that good..
Thanks again myohmy(Is that ur name)!

Wow I cant be happier right now...
740(Q50 V40 6-AWA)!

Thanks again!!!

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by krishna8684 » Fri Jul 15, 2011 2:54 am
A BIG THANKS to myohmy.

Your posts on AWA argument template and sentence correction concepts were brilliant.

Scored a 730 (Q51,V37,6.0) thanks to you!

You Rock!!