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Cornell2011
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Argument Prompt:
Recent technological improvements in electronic mail (E-mail) will resolve existing corporate communication problems. Vast quantities of information about products, services, and market transactions as well as most basic business communications, can be electronically exchanged, quickly and at a relatively low cost.
Explain how logically persuasive you find this argument. In discussing your viewpoint, analyze the argument's line of reasoning and its user of evidence. Also explain what, if anything, would make the argument more valid and convincing or help to better evaluate its conclusion.
Response:
The paragraph above fails to congently argue that recent technological improvements in electronic mail will resolve existing corporate communication problems. Rather than relying on precise and valid argumentation, the above argument employs ambiguous terms and unsubstantiated claims to derive its conclusion.
The paragraph attempts to prove that recent technological improvements in electronic mail will resolve existing communications problems. However, the paragraph does not cite any particular recent technological improvements. Further, the paragrph omits which "existing... problems" the particular technological improvements will resolve. These ambiguities weaken the argument as they obscure the meaning of the purported conclusion.
The paragraph asserts that vast quantities of information can be electronically exchanged, quickly and at relatively low cost. However, the paragraph neither clarifies how this claim links to the contention that recent improvements in email will resolve existing corporate problems nor does it substantiate the claim. While email may have made dissemination of information more efficient than regular mail, it remains unclear that any recent improvements in email have increased efficiency in email communication. Similarly, while the cost of email may be less than the cost of regular mail, the paragraph provides no evidence that recent technological improvements have lowered costs any further.
Although recent technological improvements may resolve existing corporate communication problems, the given paragraph does not effectively argue that contention. In order to effectively argue the point, the paragraph should cite the particular "recent technological improvements" and "existing corporate communication problems." Further, the paragraph should articulate the manner in which these new innovations would lower costs rather than simply asserting the point. Thus, as currently written, the stated argument remains unclear and ineffective.
Recent technological improvements in electronic mail (E-mail) will resolve existing corporate communication problems. Vast quantities of information about products, services, and market transactions as well as most basic business communications, can be electronically exchanged, quickly and at a relatively low cost.
Explain how logically persuasive you find this argument. In discussing your viewpoint, analyze the argument's line of reasoning and its user of evidence. Also explain what, if anything, would make the argument more valid and convincing or help to better evaluate its conclusion.
Response:
The paragraph above fails to congently argue that recent technological improvements in electronic mail will resolve existing corporate communication problems. Rather than relying on precise and valid argumentation, the above argument employs ambiguous terms and unsubstantiated claims to derive its conclusion.
The paragraph attempts to prove that recent technological improvements in electronic mail will resolve existing communications problems. However, the paragraph does not cite any particular recent technological improvements. Further, the paragrph omits which "existing... problems" the particular technological improvements will resolve. These ambiguities weaken the argument as they obscure the meaning of the purported conclusion.
The paragraph asserts that vast quantities of information can be electronically exchanged, quickly and at relatively low cost. However, the paragraph neither clarifies how this claim links to the contention that recent improvements in email will resolve existing corporate problems nor does it substantiate the claim. While email may have made dissemination of information more efficient than regular mail, it remains unclear that any recent improvements in email have increased efficiency in email communication. Similarly, while the cost of email may be less than the cost of regular mail, the paragraph provides no evidence that recent technological improvements have lowered costs any further.
Although recent technological improvements may resolve existing corporate communication problems, the given paragraph does not effectively argue that contention. In order to effectively argue the point, the paragraph should cite the particular "recent technological improvements" and "existing corporate communication problems." Further, the paragraph should articulate the manner in which these new innovations would lower costs rather than simply asserting the point. Thus, as currently written, the stated argument remains unclear and ineffective.
