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Martin Luther King

by gmatnmein2010 » Sat Feb 20, 2010 3:42 am
Martin Luther King Jr. won the Nobel Peace Prize, the Presidential Medal of Freedom, and was the most famous leader of the American civil rights movement.


1)Martin Luther King Jr. won the Nobel Peace Prize, the Presidential Medal of Freedom, and was the most famous leader of the American civil rights movement.


2)Martin Luther King Jr., the most famous leader of the American civil rights movement, won the Nobel Peace Prize and the Presidential Medal of Freedom.


3)Martin Luther King Jr., the most famous leader of the American civil rights movement, won the Nobel Peace Prize and he won the Presidential Medal of Freedom.


4)Martin Luther King Jr. was the most famous leader of the American civil rights movement, the winner of the Nobel Peace Prize, and he won the Presidential Medal of Freedom.


5)Martin Luther King Jr., the most famous leader of the American civil rights movement, won the Nobel Peace Prize as well as the Presidential Medal of Freedom, too.
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by thephoenix » Sat Feb 20, 2010 3:57 am
gmatnmein2010 wrote:Martin Luther King Jr. won the Nobel Peace Prize, the Presidential Medal of Freedom, and was the most famous leader of the American civil rights movement.


1)Martin Luther King Jr. won the Nobel Peace Prize, the Presidential Medal of Freedom, and was the most famous leader of the American civil rights movement.
llelism error

2)Martin Luther King Jr., the most famous leader of the American civil rights movement, won the Nobel Peace Prize and the Presidential Medal of Freedom.
The two prizes ("Nobel Peace Prize" and "Presidential Medal of Freedom") are in correct parallel format

3)Martin Luther King Jr., the most famous leader of the American civil rights movement, won the Nobel Peace Prize and he won the Presidential Medal of Freedom.
he is redundant here

4)Martin Luther King Jr. was the most famous leader of the American civil rights movement, the winner of the Nobel Peace Prize, and he won the Presidential Medal of Freedom.
llelism error

5)Martin Luther King Jr., the most famous leader of the American civil rights movement, won the Nobel Peace Prize as well as the Presidential Medal of Freedom, too.
as well as .......too redundnt



The items in a list require parallelism.
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by deepakteja1988 » Sat Jul 09, 2011 5:32 am
What if someone doesnt know that they are two different items in the list. Say "the Presidential Medal of Freedom" is modifying the noun "the Nobel Peace Prize"...which makes A look right...

Can someone explain any other reason for why A is wrong if I assume as above.
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by amit2k9 » Sat Jul 09, 2011 5:56 am
the modifier ..MLK,was the most... should be close to the noun it is modifying.
then comes the concept of the list and parallelism.

A misses this hence POE.

B is clear and clean.
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