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Charles Lindbergh, for his attempt at a solo transatlantic flight, was very reluctant to have any extra weight on his plane, he therefore refused to carry even a pound of mail, despite being offered $1,000 to do so.

A. Charles Lindbergh, for his attempt at a solo transatlantic flight, was very reluctant to have any extra weight on his plane, he therefore
B. When Charles Lindbergh was attempting his solo transatlantic flight, being very reluctant to have any extra weight on his plane, he
C. Since he was very reluctant to carry any extra weight on his plane when he was attempting his solo transatlantic flight, so Charles Lindbergh
D. Being very reluctant to carry any extra weight on his plane when he attempted his solo transatlantic flight was the reason that Charles Lindbergh
E. Very reluctant to have any extra weight on his plane when he attempted his solo transatlantic flight, Charles Lindbergh

A. Charles Lindbergh, for his attempt at a solo transatlantic flight, was very reluctant to have any extra weight on his plane, he therefore - wordy and incorrect usage of attempt at
B. When Charles Lindbergh was attempting his solo transatlantic flight, being very reluctant to have any extra weight on his plane, he - being
C. Since he was very reluctant to carry any extra weight on his plane when he was attempting his solo transatlantic flight, so Charles Lindbergh - since emphasizes continuity of an action
D. Being very reluctant to carry any extra weight on his plane when he attempted his solo transatlantic flight was the reason that Charles Lindbergh - Being
E. Very reluctant to have any extra weight on his plane when he attempted his solo transatlantic flight, Charles Lindbergh - Correct Answer

mehravikas wrote:A. Charles Lindbergh, for his attempt at a solo transatlantic flight, was very reluctant to have any extra weight on his plane, he therefore - wordy and incorrect usage of attempt at
B. When Charles Lindbergh was attempting his solo transatlantic flight, being very reluctant to have any extra weight on his plane, he - being
C. Since he was very reluctant to carry any extra weight on his plane when he was attempting his solo transatlantic flight, so Charles Lindbergh - since emphasizes continuity of an action
D. Being very reluctant to carry any extra weight on his plane when he attempted his solo transatlantic flight was the reason that Charles Lindbergh - Being
E. Very reluctant to have any extra weight on his plane when he attempted his solo transatlantic flight, Charles Lindbergh - Correct Answer

nice work ! my vote for E too.

IMO A, seems correct
use of when seems wrong to me in option E.

Can you explain why is the usage of "when" incorrect in E?

linkinpark wrote:IMO A, seems correct
use of when seems wrong to me in option E.

IMO the fight is b/n A and E
i will go with E
In A for his attempt looks awkward , it should be in his attempt or during his attempt

thephoenix wrote:IMO the fight is b/n A and E
i will go with E
In A for his attempt looks awkward , it should be in his attempt or during his attempt

attempt at is wrong idiom as well

I don't think that "attempt at" is wrong.

Attempt at - followed by a noun
Attempt to - followed by a verb

maihuna wrote:

thephoenix wrote:IMO the fight is b/n A and E
i will go with E
In A for his attempt looks awkward , it should be in his attempt or during his attempt

attempt at is wrong idiom as well

mehravikas wrote:I don't think that "attempt at" is wrong.

Attempt at - followed by a noun
Attempt to - followed by a verb

maihuna wrote:

thephoenix wrote:IMO the fight is b/n A and E
i will go with E
In A for his attempt looks awkward , it should be in his attempt or during his attempt

attempt at is wrong idiom as well

IMO E....

E has proper pronoun reference & clear intended meaning.

mehravikas wrote:I don't think that "attempt at" is wrong.

Attempt at - followed by a noun
Attempt to - followed by a verb

maihuna wrote:

thephoenix wrote:IMO the fight is b/n A and E
i will go with E
In A for his attempt looks awkward , it should be in his attempt or during his attempt

attempt at is wrong idiom as well

humm good point that, can you please illustrate with current example how it is justified?

IMO ...

Choice A is a run-on sentence. In choice E, the modifier 'Very reluctant to have any extra weight on his plane when he attempted his solo transatlantic flight' correctly modifies Charles Lindbergh

My first attempt at the GMAT will be on the 30th.
American economists continually attempt to gauge the health....

maihuna wrote:

mehravikas wrote:I don't think that "attempt at" is wrong.

Attempt at - followed by a noun
Attempt to - followed by a verb

maihuna wrote:

thephoenix wrote:IMO the fight is b/n A and E
i will go with E
In A for his attempt looks awkward , it should be in his attempt or during his attempt

attempt at is wrong idiom as well

humm good point that, can you please illustrate with current example how it is justified?

IMO "the reason why",not "the reason that" should be the correct idiom