The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group.
a.The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group.
b. Whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group, the mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group.
c.The maternal copy of Nesp55 encourages mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or the defense of the group.
d.Whether looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group, the maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group when doing such activities.
e.The mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group.
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-Passive voice.daretodream wrote:The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group.
a.The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group.
b. Whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group, the mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group. -Voice of sentence changes.
c.The maternal copy of Nesp55 encourages mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or the defense of the group. -I think this is the most appropriate representation.
d.Whether looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group, the maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group when doing such activities. -Too wordy.
e.The mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group.
Hey daretodream,
I guess you have forgotten to underline the incorrect part in all the questions you posted.It makes it very difficult to find as to which part of the sentence we have to concentrate on.
Kindly underline using the "u" button below the "Subject-Form Box".
Though over here,it seems that the whole sentence is underlined,but in 2 of ur other posts i found that u had not underlined the incorrect part.
I think the answer is C.
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The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group.
a.The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group. The mice - has no referent, "more risks" (plural) followed by "that risk" (singular) hence plural error. INCORRECT
b. Whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group, the mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group. "That risk" has no referent hence can't start with "that risk", again "the mice" suggests mice have been refered earlier, which is not the case
c.The maternal copy of Nesp55 encourages mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or the defense of the group. clear parallelism error - INCORRECT
d.Whether looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group, the maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group when doing such activities. Awkward, specially at the end, but hold it
e.The mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group - Can't start the sentence with "the mice" plus unnecessary passive usage - INCORRECT
I will go with the lesser evil - D, since A needs to be fixed in at least 2 places., [EDIT - Sorry, D is so wrong, Substandard Question, none of the above]
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a.The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group. The mice - has no referent, "more risks" (plural) followed by "that risk" (singular) hence plural error. INCORRECT
b. Whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group, the mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group. "That risk" has no referent hence can't start with "that risk", again "the mice" suggests mice have been refered earlier, which is not the case
c.The maternal copy of Nesp55 encourages mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or the defense of the group. clear parallelism error - INCORRECT
d.Whether looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group, the maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group when doing such activities. Awkward, specially at the end, but hold it
e.The mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group - Can't start the sentence with "the mice" plus unnecessary passive usage - INCORRECT
I will go with the lesser evil - D, since A needs to be fixed in at least 2 places., [EDIT - Sorry, D is so wrong, Substandard Question, none of the above]
What is the source of this Q????
@ the OP - please underline the suspect portion of the sentence
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(A) CORRECT. its llel
the parallel structure of "looking. . .finding. . .defending" is concise.
(B) This choice has an awkward and wordy construction. "Acting in the defense of the group" is wordier than "defending the group" without making the meaning clearer. It also makes the choice less parallel: "looking. . .finding. . .acting in the defense." Furthermore, the passive construction "may be encouraged by," is unnecessarily wordy. Finally, the ending phrase "on behalf of the group" is unnecessary.
(C) This choice changes the meaning. "Encourages" implies a certainty that "may encourage" does not. Also, "looking. . .finding. . .the defense" is less parallel than "looking. . .finding. . .defending."
(D) This choice is wordy and lacks clarity. Beginning with the long dependent clause "whether looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group,..." detracts from the clarity. Also, the ending phrase "when doing such activities" is wordy and unnecessary.
(E) This choice uses the wordier passive construction "may be encouraged" instead of the active construction "may encourage." This choice uses the less concise "acting in the defense of the group" instead of "defending the group." This change also makes the choice less parallel: "looking. . .finding. . .acting in the defense."
the parallel structure of "looking. . .finding. . .defending" is concise.
(B) This choice has an awkward and wordy construction. "Acting in the defense of the group" is wordier than "defending the group" without making the meaning clearer. It also makes the choice less parallel: "looking. . .finding. . .acting in the defense." Furthermore, the passive construction "may be encouraged by," is unnecessarily wordy. Finally, the ending phrase "on behalf of the group" is unnecessary.
(C) This choice changes the meaning. "Encourages" implies a certainty that "may encourage" does not. Also, "looking. . .finding. . .the defense" is less parallel than "looking. . .finding. . .defending."
(D) This choice is wordy and lacks clarity. Beginning with the long dependent clause "whether looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group,..." detracts from the clarity. Also, the ending phrase "when doing such activities" is wordy and unnecessary.
(E) This choice uses the wordier passive construction "may be encouraged" instead of the active construction "may encourage." This choice uses the less concise "acting in the defense of the group" instead of "defending the group." This change also makes the choice less parallel: "looking. . .finding. . .acting in the defense."
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My pick is A.daretodream wrote:The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group.
a.The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group.
b. Whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group, the mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group.
c.The maternal copy of Nesp55 encourages mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or the defense of the group.
d.Whether looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group, the maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group when doing such activities.
e.The mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group.
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Also if you change may encourage to encourages..that will change the whole context.prinit wrote:My pick is A.daretodream wrote:The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group.
a.The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group.
b. Whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group, the mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group.
c.The maternal copy of Nesp55 encourages mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or the defense of the group.
d.Whether looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group, the maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group when doing such activities.
e.The mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group.
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Since the the maternal copy is singular don't you all think that the verb will be encourages instead of encouragedaretodream wrote:The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group.
a.The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group.
b. Whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group, the mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group.
c.The maternal copy of Nesp55 encourages mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or the defense of the group.
d.Whether looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group, the maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group when doing such activities.
e.The mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group.
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viidyasagar wrote:
e.The mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group - Can't start the sentence with "the mice" plus unnecessary passive usage - INCORRECT
Why can't we start a sentence with The mice ?
IMO, it is perfectly fine and correct to have definite article the before mice, because we are referring to a particular species.
E should not be picked because it focuses more on The mice than on The maternal copy and is definitely wordier than A. ( acting in the defense of the group vs defending the group )
In option D, the first clause modifies the mice and hence, the mice should follow the comma after this clause.
Hence, IMO A for the same reasons as given by thephoenix.
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there is a may between copy and encourage and hence, it is correct to use these words in this way.aman_adonis wrote:
Since the the maternal copy is singular don't you all think that the verb will be encourages instead of encourage
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I'll go with A because of parallel structure of "looking. . .finding. . .defending"
B: "Acting in the defense of the group" is wordier
C: changes meaning. "Encourages"instead of "may encourage"
D: wordy.
IMO A
B: "Acting in the defense of the group" is wordier
C: changes meaning. "Encourages"instead of "may encourage"
D: wordy.
IMO A
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