GMAT Essays (AWA)

"Company X's latest model of digital camera to be released next month, the TR12, is being promoted as the most portable, user-friendly digital camera available, and also an excellent bargain. It can be expected to live up to these claims, because Company X's previous model, the TR11, was universally lauded as setting the standard in these areas last year."

The argument is not so bad, however it can be presented even better, allowing no gap for a flaw. One major flaw the author makes is to compare an existing product to an upcoming product. Further the argument also takes into account a single product and a single year, in which company X has delivered a good product. Its almost earlier days to stick to such a prediction with only a few facts and assumptions.

First, the argument compares and existing product,TR11 with an upcoming one,TR12. It's not always wise to compare a live product with an upcoming one, specially when the former is a major hit. We cannot perceive that every product of company X will be a hit. The author might have added arguments introducing the same.

Secondly, the argument compares last year's performance with the upcoming year. It cannot be guaranteed that every year will be a good one for company X. A good year with a good product does not account for future success of the company, specially in electronics sector, where competition and innovation is at its peak.

Adding to this, the argument misses to pose any competiton for the product. There might be a product or many products down the line which proves to be better than the TR12. This might further hurt the argument, as this will make the claim made by company X, superficial. The argument must also hold a hint on the upcoming products down the line which are in nowhere in competition to TR12, which would be a serious strengthener for the argument.

Further, there is high probability that the claims made by company X are just made to boost sales and to maintaing the state of "setting standards" in its class. There is no evidence on the ethical line of Company X, wherein it is widely accepted to showcase only real facts and does not mislead by such false promotions.

The argument, in another way does pose some doubt on the reader. The argument ends by saying "It can be expected..." which poses a major doubt about the company X's product even on the author. The author himself is not sure on the claims made by company X. It is important for the argument to be credible for the conclusion it holds. This argument, lacks the credibility. Its just another view of an upcoming product, in an casual manner.

In sum, although the argument does seem to be a decent one, there are major holes which need to be filled as discussed above to make the argument better and more accountable.

The first line: You could have written
The argument is not persuasive, it needs better explanation.
I always like such one-sided statements.
You wrote the argument is good but can be better.. this comparision is not measureble.

The second and the furthers: Awesome reasons.. actually,I have learned a few from your below thoughts...

The last: You could have added suggestions to the conclusion para.

Thank you for sharing the ideas...