Sentence Correction

GMATGuruNY wrote: 1.seven people have been killed (subject + verb) and the ones who are killed (pronoun + who-modifier) are NOT parallel forms.

2. E: Only seven people this century have been killed by the great white shark, fewer than the ones killed by bee stings.
E incorrectly compares a VERB (have been killed) to a MODIFIER (the killed in red)

RBBmba@2014 wrote:Thanks GMATGuruNY.
Just curious to know whether the following structure would be correct ?

Only seven people this century have been killed by the great white shark, fewer than [people] have been killed by bee stings.

It should make sense, I guess. Thoughts ?

GMATGuruNY wrote: 1.seven people have been killed (subject + verb) and the ones who are killed (pronoun + who-modifier) are NOT parallel forms.

2. E: Only seven people this century have been killed by the great white shark, fewer than the ones killed by bee stings.
E incorrectly compares a VERB (have been killed) to a MODIFIER (the killed in red)

And are the above TWO ALWAYS considered wrong (as non-PARALLEL FORMS in COMPARISON SC) on GMAT ?

Why it'd be wrong to consider Verb-ed Modifier as IMPLIED Passive Voice, and hence PARALLEL to the MAIN VERB in active voice ?

GMATGuruNY wrote:

RBBmba@2014 wrote:Thanks GMATGuruNY.
Just curious to know whether the following structure would be correct ?

Only seven people this century have been killed by the great white shark, fewer than [people] have been killed by bee stings.

It should make sense, I guess. Thoughts ?

When ellipsis serves to convert a sentence into a modifier, one constraint is that the resulting modifier cannot include a complete clause.
Since the insertion of people forms a complete clause -- people have been killed by bee stings -- this revision is not viable.

GMATGuruNY wrote:

RBBmba@2014 wrote:

GMATGuruNY wrote: 1.seven people have been killed (subject + verb) and the ones who are killed (pronoun + who-modifier) are NOT parallel forms.

2. E: Only seven people this century have been killed by the great white shark, fewer than the ones killed by bee stings.
E incorrectly compares a VERB (have been killed) to a MODIFIER (the killed in red)

And are the above TWO ALWAYS considered wrong (as non-PARALLEL FORMS in COMPARISON SC) on GMAT ?

Why it'd be wrong to consider Verb-ed Modifier as IMPLIED Passive Voice, and hence PARALLEL to the MAIN VERB in active voice ?

A VERB and a MODIFIER will always be considered NONPARALLEL forms.
E: the ones killed by bee stings
Here, killed is a MODIFIER.
No other interpretation is viable.
Thus, it is incorrect to compare the ones killed (pronoun + modifier) to people have been killed (subject + verb).

RBBmba@2014 wrote: OK. But does this -- one constraint is that the resulting modifier cannot include a complete clause -- ALWAYS hold true in ELLIPSIS in COMPARISON SCs on GMAT ?

So, (subject + verb) can NEVER be compared to (NOUN/pronoun + modifier such as Relative Clause or Verb-ed or any other types) as they're always considered NONPARALLEL forms in GMAT. Right ?

GMATGuruNY wrote:

RBBmba@2014 wrote: OK. But does this -- one constraint is that the resulting modifier cannot include a complete clause -- ALWAYS hold true in ELLIPSIS in COMPARISON SCs on GMAT ?

The rule here is as follows:
A modifier connected to the main body of a sentence solely by a comma cannot contain an independent clause.
This rule will hold true regardless of the usage of ellipsis.

GMATGuruNY wrote:

So, (subject + verb) can NEVER be compared to (NOUN/pronoun + modifier such as Relative Clause or Verb-ed or any other types) as they're always considered NONPARALLEL forms in GMAT. Right ?

This sounds right.

RBBmba@2014 wrote: However, if A modifier connected to the main body of a sentence solely by a comma contains a Dependent clause ? Then how it's to be dealt with ?

But if (subject + ACTIVE verb) is COMPARED in GMAT SC with (NOUN/pronoun + PASSIVE verb) , then will this COMPARISON be accepted as correct in GMAT or will they too be considered NONPARALLEL forms ?

GMATGuruNY wrote: Only PARALLEL FORMS can be compared.
E: Only seven people this century have been killed by the great white shark, fewer than the ones killed by bee stings.
Here, the killed in red serves not as a verb but as an ADJECTIVE describing ones.
What KIND of ones?
Ones KILLED BY BEES STINGS.
As result, E incorrectly compares a VERB (have been killed) to a MODIFIER (the killed in red)
Eliminate E.

bonetlobo wrote:

GMATGuruNY wrote: Only PARALLEL FORMS can be compared.
E: Only seven people this century have been killed by the great white shark, fewer than the ones killed by bee stings.
Here, the killed in red serves not as a verb but as an ADJECTIVE describing ones.
What KIND of ones?
Ones KILLED BY BEES STINGS.
As result, E incorrectly compares a VERB (have been killed) to a MODIFIER (the killed in red)
Eliminate E.

Hello GMATGuruNY, a quick question. Is it possible that E is also incorrect because it can be interpreted like this:

Only seven people this century have been killed by the great white shark, the man-eater of the movies, fewer than the ones killed by bee stings (have been killed by the great white shark).