Sentence Correction

Hi,

This question was raised beofre but didnt get much attention.Pls explain

Children who watch a great deal of Television and their families have a history of near-sightedness will probably require glasses sooner than their peers who are not predisposed to myopia in these ways

1. and their families have a history of near-sightedness
2. whose families have a history of near-sightedness
3. and a history of near-sightedness runs in the family
4. whose families have a history of near-sightedness running in them
5. with a history of near-sightedness running in the family

i am with 2 n 5 to choose from........not able to............which of options is right?

i feel its 5
although i m not rally cool in sc

but feel that whose rite after television cld be wierd in 2 o may be 5

plz correct me if i m wrong

could someone help?

I go with B.

Children who watch a great deal of Television whose families have a history of near-sightedness is correct rather than awkwardly phrased nearsightedness running in their family. we never say "running in their faimly". [/i]

On coming back to the question after some time....i too feel (too mild, need concrete stuff) (2) is more appropriate but can someone provide grounds on which to reject (5)

abby_g,
u wrote that (5) is awkward.............that apart, are there other reasons to reject (5)?


thanks

(5) - incorrect -- Children who watch a great deal of television with a history of ....=> children watch television having a history of....


IMO none of the choices seems to be correct.... What is the source of your question ?....

Prachi, I was hoping ud stumble upon this question

Its from another post that id seen. dont know if its from this forum.

thanks

prachipareekh wrote:(5) - incorrect -- Children who watch a great deal of television with a history of ....=> children watch television having a history of....


IMO none of the choices seems to be correct.... What is the source of your question ?....

It appears in one of the Kaplan tests. I was stuck with this one as well. The OA is B. I'll post the OE soon.

Here's the OE:
"This sentence contains a nonparallel construction that results in an ambiguous interpretation of the sentence. The children here are described in two ways: "who watch a great deal of television" and "their families have a history of near-sightedness". These two descriptive phrases should be stated in the same way to make it clear that both phrases describe the children. At first reading, it sounds like the children watch a great deal of television AND they watch their families. (2) makes the two items parallel by changing "their" to "whose". Now it is clear that the two descriptive phrases ("who watch a great deal of television" and "whose families have a history of near-sightedness") modify the children as was intended. (3) eliminates the ambiguous meaning but does not make the two descriptive phrases parallel. (4) creates a problem by omitting the word "and" between the two descriptive phrases. (5) does not correct the parallel construction problem."

B is the answer... good question