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You will love to read this. This is NOT written by ThroughMBA. I just wonder how many of us like write him. Sharing for fun

3A. ESSAY: IN ORDER FOR THE ADMISSIONS STAFF OF OUR COLLEGE TO GET TO KNOW YOU, THE APPLICANT, BETTER, WE ASK THAT YOU ANSWER THE FOLLOWING QUESTION:

ARE THERE ANY SIGNIFICANT EXPERIENCES YOU HAVE HAD, OR ACCOMPLISHMENTS YOU HAVE REALIZED, THAT HAVE HELPED TO DEFINE YOU AS A PERSON?

I am a dynamic figure, often seen scaling walls and crushing ice. I have been known to remodel train stations on my lunch breaks, making them more efficient in the area of heat retention. I translate ethnic slurs for Cuban refugees, I write award-winning operas, I manage time efficiently. Occasionally, I tread water for three days in a row.

I woo women with my sensuous and godlike trombone playing, I can pilot bicycles up severe inclines with unflagging speed, and I cook Thirty-Minute Brownies in twenty minutes. I am an expert in stucco, a veteran in love, and an outlaw in Peru.

Using only a hoe and a large glass of water, I once single-handedly defended a small village in the Amazon Basin from a horde of ferocious army ants. I play bluegrass cello, I was scouted by the Mets, I am the subject of numerous documentaries. When I'm bored, I build large suspension bridges in my yard. I enjoy urban hang gliding. On Wednesdays, after school, I repair electrical appliances free of charge.

I am an abstract artist, a concrete analyst, and a ruthless bookie. Critics worldwide swoon over my original line of corduroy evening wear. I don't perspire. I am a private citizen, yet I receive fan mail. I have been caller number nine and have won the weekend passes. Last summer I toured New Jersey with a traveling centrifugal-force demonstration. I bat 400. My deft floral arrangements have earned me fame in international botany circles. Children trust me.

I can hurl tennis rackets at small moving objects with deadly accuracy. I once read Paradise Lost, Moby Dick, and David Copperfield in one day and still had time to refurbish an entire dining room that evening. I know the exact location of every food item in the supermarket. I have performed several covert operations for the CIA. I sleep once a week; when I do sleep, I sleep in a chair. While on vacation in Canada, I successfully negotiated with a group of terrorists who had seized a small bakery. The laws of physics do not apply to me.

I balance, I weave, I dodge, I frolic, and my bills are all paid. On weekends, to let off steam, I participate in full-contact origami. Years ago I discovered the meaning of life but forgot to write it down. I have made extraordinary four course meals using only a mouli and a toaster oven. I breed prizewinning clams. I have won bullfights in San Juan, cliff-diving competitions in Sri Lanka, and spelling bees at the Kremlin. I have played Hamlet, I have performed open-heart surgery, and I have spoken with Elvis.

But I have not yet gone to college.
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by down_not_out » Sat Nov 19, 2011 7:57 am
and i can calculate the distance between two horns of deliemma ... LOL

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by MM_Ed » Mon Nov 21, 2011 9:36 pm
If you found one of my answers useful, hit the shiny Thanks button! : )

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by itheenigma » Tue Nov 22, 2011 10:47 am
Wow! Now that's creative writing! :-D

While I commend the effort, I'm thinking about what exactly this essay has achieved. If I were the ad-com person reading this fine work of writing, I can only sum up that the applicant is a bold risk taker (he has used up an entire essay, but I'm assuming his other essays are equally brilliant but have hit the nail on the head), a creative person and probably a glib talker, definitely a good communicator.
But as an applicant, am I ready to take the risk of the possibility of a grumpy adcom person perceiving this as waste of his time (an essay with very little information content). As a matter of fact, the question asked for information about what he/she had done so as to get to know the applicant better, rather we now have stuff he/she hasn't done.

Either way, is this essay worth the time and the creative juices that the applicant spent on it? It would have been perfect to have a maximum of 2 paragraphs of this, and follow it up with business as usual. But it wouldn't have packed the punch it does now.

Hmmm...maybe I'm overanalyzing what goes on in an admission committee member's mind...Anyways, a solid essay. :)

Cheers!