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In the second last paragraph near the end, I would have changed "their customer" to "the consumers of Omnilixir". Changing the sentence would correct for the ambiguity of the word "their" as it is not clear what subject it is. In the same sentence as above, after the co...
- by ndureault
Wed Dec 30, 2015 1:48 pm- Forum: GMAT Essays (AWA)
- Topic: Expert Reviews are Welcome - Please Grade my Essay :)
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Expert Reviews are Welcome - Please Grade my Essay :)
Thank you very much for taking the time to read this. This is my first real attempt at writing the AWA timed. Please be gentle. Prompt: The following appeared in a memorandum from the director of marketing for a pharmaceutical company "According to a survey of 5,000 urban residents, the prevale...
- by ndureault
Wed Dec 30, 2015 1:28 pm- Forum: GMAT Essays (AWA)
- Topic: Expert Reviews are Welcome - Please Grade my Essay :)
- Replies: 1
- Views: 1684