Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives, capitalized on her keen observation and love of the natural world.
(A) Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives,
(B) In her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
(C) In her book illustrations, which she carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
(D) Carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations
(E) Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinated them with her narratives and
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(A) Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives,
This just reads weird, so I eliminate.
(B) In her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
Also doesn't make sense to me
(C) In her book illustrations, which she carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
I keep this one because it reads ok. I assume that the last comma is also underlined?
(D) Carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations
Beatrix Potter is not the one coordinated with her narratives
(E) Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinated them with her narratives and
Beatrix Potter is not in her book illustrations
So C is my guess.
I know i'm not very helpful in explaining things- I apologize. But sometimes things just sound wrong to me.[/i]
This just reads weird, so I eliminate.
(B) In her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
Also doesn't make sense to me
(C) In her book illustrations, which she carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
I keep this one because it reads ok. I assume that the last comma is also underlined?
(D) Carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations
Beatrix Potter is not the one coordinated with her narratives
(E) Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinated them with her narratives and
Beatrix Potter is not in her book illustrations
So C is my guess.
I know i'm not very helpful in explaining things- I apologize. But sometimes things just sound wrong to me.[/i]
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You have actually done a very good job, so why sound apologetic.
Pronoun error as them does not refer to anything explicit.
Eliminate A, B, E
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D can be eliminated as it appears the author is co-ordinated with her narratives ... Modifier error
C is correct as the meaning is correct, she co-ordinated her worldly skills with her narratives in some book.
Pronoun error as them does not refer to anything explicit.
Eliminate A, B, E
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D can be eliminated as it appears the author is co-ordinated with her narratives ... Modifier error
C is correct as the meaning is correct, she co-ordinated her worldly skills with her narratives in some book.
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I think it is A.
As the rule says, we don't use pronouns before nouns in a sentence, this rules out C.
As the rule says, we don't use pronouns before nouns in a sentence, this rules out C.
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(A) Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives,
them is ambiguous
(B) In her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
same as a
(C) In her book illustrations, which she carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
looks good
(D) Carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations
sounds like Ms potter herself was coordinated
(E) Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinated them with her narratives and
same as D[/i][/b]
them is ambiguous
(B) In her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
same as a
(C) In her book illustrations, which she carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
looks good
(D) Carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations
sounds like Ms potter herself was coordinated
(E) Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinated them with her narratives and
same as D[/i][/b]
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Received a PM asking me to comment on A and E - in particular, why "them" is a problem in E (according to the test-writers).
The basic lesson here is that the official test writers do not like multiple modifying clauses in a row that separate the subject and verb. The longer the modifying clauses (or phrases) are, the more "awkward" they are, according to the writers.
Subject = Beatrix Potter
Verb = capitalized
Modifier #1 = in her book illustrations
Modifier #2 = carefully... narratives
So A says: Subject, M#1, M#2, verb. The test writers think this is awkward. Are there any better choices? Yes. C says: M#1, M#2, Subject Verb. That's "better" than A.
E changes the status of M#2. That bit is now elevated to one of two main verbs; it's no longer a modifier: Subject, modifier, verb (coordinated) and verb (capitalized). How does this change things?
The test writers hold to a somewhat obscure rule about pronouns. Prepositional phrases are modifiers. "In her book illustrations" is a prepositional phrase and it is an adverbial modifier; it modifies the main clause ("Beatrix Potter... coordinated them... and capitalized on..." The test writers say that pronouns used in the main clause cannot refer to nouns located in a (subordinate) modifying phrase, because the modifying phrase is already itself referring to the main clause. It's like an endless circle.
I think it's a bit easier to "hear" if we plug in the antecedent for the pronoun:
Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, coordinated them...
Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, coordinated her book illustrations...
So she coordinated the illustrations in the illustrations? Do you "hear" the problem now?
(By the way, going back to A for a minute, you can try this same thing there - same problem. "BP, in her illustrations, coordinating her illustrations, capitalized..."
Alternatively, you might be tempted to interpret "in her book illustrations" as a noun modifier, not an adverbial modifier. If so, then the prepositional phrase would be modifying Beatrix Potter alone... and, as someone else pointed out above, she is not in her own book illustrations.
Also, someone mentioned above that pronouns can only come after their antecedents. It is usually true that pronouns come after antecedents, but it is not required. There are multiple examples in the OG in which the pronouns come before the antecedents.
The basic lesson here is that the official test writers do not like multiple modifying clauses in a row that separate the subject and verb. The longer the modifying clauses (or phrases) are, the more "awkward" they are, according to the writers.
Subject = Beatrix Potter
Verb = capitalized
Modifier #1 = in her book illustrations
Modifier #2 = carefully... narratives
So A says: Subject, M#1, M#2, verb. The test writers think this is awkward. Are there any better choices? Yes. C says: M#1, M#2, Subject Verb. That's "better" than A.
E changes the status of M#2. That bit is now elevated to one of two main verbs; it's no longer a modifier: Subject, modifier, verb (coordinated) and verb (capitalized). How does this change things?
The test writers hold to a somewhat obscure rule about pronouns. Prepositional phrases are modifiers. "In her book illustrations" is a prepositional phrase and it is an adverbial modifier; it modifies the main clause ("Beatrix Potter... coordinated them... and capitalized on..." The test writers say that pronouns used in the main clause cannot refer to nouns located in a (subordinate) modifying phrase, because the modifying phrase is already itself referring to the main clause. It's like an endless circle.
I think it's a bit easier to "hear" if we plug in the antecedent for the pronoun:
Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, coordinated them...
Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, coordinated her book illustrations...
So she coordinated the illustrations in the illustrations? Do you "hear" the problem now?
(By the way, going back to A for a minute, you can try this same thing there - same problem. "BP, in her illustrations, coordinating her illustrations, capitalized..."
Alternatively, you might be tempted to interpret "in her book illustrations" as a noun modifier, not an adverbial modifier. If so, then the prepositional phrase would be modifying Beatrix Potter alone... and, as someone else pointed out above, she is not in her own book illustrations.
Also, someone mentioned above that pronouns can only come after their antecedents. It is usually true that pronouns come after antecedents, but it is not required. There are multiple examples in the OG in which the pronouns come before the antecedents.
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