Sentence Correction

High in the sky, soaring over the foothills that on hot, dry days look like brushed brown suede, the condor attains a majesty that is rare among birds in flight.

High in the sky, soaring over the foothills that on hot, dry days look like brushed brown suede, the condor attains a majesty that is rare among birds in flight.

The condor, being high in the sky and soaring over foothills that on hot, dry days look like brushed brown suede, attains a rare majesty among birds in flight.

The condor, when it is high in the sky and soars over the foothills that on hot dry days look as if they might be brushed dry suede, attains a majesty that is rare among birds in flight.

On hot, dry days, when the foothills look like brushed brown suede and the condor, high in the sky, soars over them, it attains a majesty that is rare among birds in flight.

Attaining a majesty that is rare among birds in flight, high in the sky, the condor soars over foothills that look like brushed brown suede on hot, dry days.

IMO: A

GmatKiss wrote:High in the sky, soaring over the foothills that on hot, dry days look like brushed brown suede, the condor attains a majesty that is rare among birds in flight.

High in the sky, soaring over the foothills that on hot, dry days look like brushed brown suede, the condor attains a majesty that is rare among birds in flight.

The condor, being high in the sky and soaring over foothills that on hot, dry days look like brushed brown suede, attains a rare majesty among birds in flight.

The condor, when it is high in the sky and soars over the foothills that on hot dry days look as if they might be brushed dry suede, attains a majesty that is rare among birds in flight.

On hot, dry days, when the foothills look like brushed brown suede and the condor, high in the sky, soars over them, it attains a majesty that is rare among birds in flight.

Attaining a majesty that is rare among birds in flight, high in the sky, the condor soars over foothills that look like brushed brown suede on hot, dry days.

C - 'hot dry days' CHANGED from 2 different and related adjectives (HOT and DRY) in original sentences. C makes HOT an ADVERB; THEY could refer to FOOTHILLS and DAYS

D - totally jumbled; makes SUEDE and THE CONDOR as ADJECTIVES OF Foothills; this is not correct as the original sentence suggests SUEDE adjective of CANDOR; What does IT refer to SUEDE or CANDOR

E - changes the main point of the sentence into subordinate point (attaining a majesty = is the main thrust of the original sentence); what does HIGH IN SKY modify - BIRDS or THE CONDOR

B - it is a challenge to drop B (other thn BEING), but IMO B distorts the sentence meaning by connecting the two parts (ie being high in the sky AND soaring over foothills..) by AND. It means "being high in the sky" AND "soaring over foothills" are two different activties, BUT in the original sentence the "soaring over foothills" is actually after effect of HIGH IN THE SKY

IMO A