Sentence Correction

Frankenstein wrote:Hi,
IMO B
relative pronoun that is essential. So, A,E are out
'as' is essential to convey the meaning of how the industry has radically changed.
So, C,D are out because they change the meaning.

Cheers!

Frankenstein wrote:Hi,
IMO B
relative pronoun that is essential. So, A,E are out
'as' is essential to convey the meaning of how the industry has radically changed.
So, C,D are out because they change the meaning.

Cheers!

aspirant2011 wrote:

Frankenstein wrote:Hi,
IMO B
relative pronoun that is essential. So, A,E are out
'as' is essential to convey the meaning of how the industry has radically changed.
So, C,D are out because they change the meaning.

Cheers!

I agree with you that we require "that" but don't you feel the comma structure is awkward in option B because I feel that there shouldn't be any comma between integrated companiesand such as Bethlehem Steel

David@VeritasPrep wrote:Got a PM on this one:

I would just echo what Frankenstein has said. I am not a big "comma" guy. On really important papers I always get someone to check on my commas for me...nevertheless I get GMAT SC right.

Commas are only there to help you on sentence correction not to be a burden. If the comma can guide you then take the hint. But here B, C, AND D all have the comma in the same place - since A and E are out with the relative clause missing you have NO CHOICE on the comma.

This sentence may be painful to you to choose B, but remember the correct answer is not necessarily a sentence you would have written - just the best of the 5!

"The steel industry has changed radically over the last two decades, as large, integrated companies such as Bethlehem Steel once conducted operations from mining at one end of the process to shipping at the other have greatly downsized, or in some cases shut down altogether."

David@VeritasPrep wrote:You have to deal with complex sentences like this one by doing what we call at Veritas "slash and burn" or I sometimes call "eliminate the clutter."

Here is the original sentence.

"The steel industry has changed radically over the last two decades, as large, integrated companies such as Bethlehem Steel once conducted operations from mining at one end of the process to shipping at the other have greatly downsized, or in some cases shut down altogether."

Here is the sentence with the modifiers and prepositions highlighted.

"The steel industry has changed radically over the last two decades, as large, integrated companies such as Bethlehem Steel once conducted operations from mining at one end of the process to shipping at the other have greatly downsized, or in some cases shut down altogether."

Now read the sentence without the portions in red - it is simpler and cleaner. Now in this case you have to use part of the modifiers in red to make a decision but in most cases the modifiers can get out of your way.

So maybe it is a big convoluted but not bad.

a_new_start wrote:

David@VeritasPrep wrote: Can you please explain what is wrong with 'with' in choice C

A clause has both a subject and a verb.
A preposition such as with cannot be followed by a clause.
C: with large, integrated companies...have greatly downsized
Here, with is incorrectly followed by a clause (large, integrated companies have greatly downsized).
Eliminate C.

GMATGuruNY wrote:

a_new_start wrote:

David@VeritasPrep wrote: Can you please explain what is wrong with 'with' in choice C

A clause has both a subject and a verb.
A preposition such as with cannot be followed by a clause.
C: with large, integrated companies...have greatly downsized
Here, with is incorrectly followed by a clause (large, integrated companies have greatly downsized).
Eliminate C.

Thank You Mitch. Point taken.

The steel industry has changed radically over the last two decades, as large, integrated companies such as Bethlehem Steel once conducted operations from mining at one end of the process to shipping at the other have greatly downsized, or in some cases shut down altogether.


Option C) The steel industry has changed radically over the last two decades, with large, integrated companies, such as Bethlehem Steel, that once conducted operations from mining at one end of the process to shipping at the other have greatly downsized, or in some cases shut down altogether.

What I know is "comma + with" construction works as an adverbial modifier modifying the action of the previous clause.
The verb in the previous clause is "has changed". If I check the usage of 'with' this way, is it correct ?

Can I say the steel industry has changed with companies such as BS that once conducted (blah blah...)

Would like to hear from you.

GMATGuruNY wrote:

a_new_start wrote:

David@VeritasPrep wrote: Can you please explain what is wrong with 'with' in choice C

A clause has both a subject and a verb.
A preposition such as with cannot be followed by a clause.
C: with large, integrated companies...have greatly downsized
Here, with is incorrectly followed by a clause (large, integrated companies have greatly downsized).
Eliminate C.

Here, with is incorrectly followed by a clause (large, integrated companies have greatly downsized).


Please explain this in detail as I am confused.

GMATGuruNY wrote:

richachampion wrote:

GMATGuruNY wrote:A clause has both a subject and a verb.
A preposition such as with cannot be followed by a clause.
C: with large, integrated companies...have greatly downsized
Here, with is incorrectly followed by a clause (large, integrated companies have greatly downsized).
Eliminate C.

Here, with is incorrectly followed by a clause (large, integrated companies have greatly downsized).


Please explain this in detail as I am confused.

C: The steel industry has changed radically over the last two decades, with large, integrated companies such as Bethlehem Steel, that once conducted operations from mining at one end of the process to shipping at the other have greatly downsized.
The two colored portions above function as modifiers.
If we omit these modifiers, we get:
The steel industry has changed radically over the last two decades, with large, integrated companies have greatly downsized.
Here, the portion in red constitutes a clause, since it contains both a subject (large, integrated companies) and a verb (have greatly downsized).
As mentioned in my post above, a preposition such as with cannot serve to introduce a clause.
Eliminate C.