Sentence Correction

Introduced by Italian merchant resident in London during the sixteen century, in England life insurance remained until the end of the seventeen century a specialized contract between individual underwriters and their clients, typically being ship owners , overseas merchant, or professional moneylenders.

A) in England life insurance remained until the end of the seventeen century a specialized contract between individual underwriters and their clients, typically being

B) in Egland life insurance had remained until the end of the seventeen century a specialized contract between individual underwriters with their clients, who typically were

C) until the end of the seventeen century life insurance in England had remained a specialized contract between individual underwriters and their clients, typically

D) life insurance in England remained until the end of the seventeen century a specialized contract between individual underwriters and their clients, typically

E) life insurance remained until the end of the seventeen century in England a specialized contract between individual underwriters with their clients, who typically were.

OAD

Please explain why E is wrong?

Many thanks in advance.

Kavin

[spoiler][E][/spoiler] is wrong because of between ..... with....
The correct form is between.....and....

Needgmat wrote:Please explain why E is wrong?

Many thanks in advance.

Kavin

E: between individual underwriters with their clients
Here, between...with is unidiomatic.
The correct idiom -- between X AND Y -- appears in the OA:
between individual underwriters AND their clients.
Eliminate E.

E: life insurance remained...in England
Here, in England is an adverb serving to modify remained, expressing WHERE life insurance remained.
Implied meaning:
Life insurance was not offered in other countries but REMAINED IN ENGLAND.
Not the intended meaning.
Eliminate E.

The intended meaning is expressed by the OA:
Life insurance in England remained...a specialized contract.
Here, in England is an ADJECTIVE serving to describe life insurance.
What TYPE of life insurance?
Life insurance IN ENGLAND.
Conveyed meaning:
A particular TYPE of life insurance -- life insurance in England -- remained a specialized contract.

E: between individual underwriters with their clients
Here, between...with is unidiomatic.
The correct idiom -- between X AND Y -- appears in the OA:
between individual underwriters AND their clients.
Eliminate E.

E: life insurance remained...in England
Here, in England is an adverb serving to modify remained, expressing WHERE life insurance remained.
Implied meaning:
Life insurance was not offered in other countries but REMAINED IN ENGLAND.
Not the intended meaning.
Eliminate E.

The intended meaning is expressed by the OA:
Life insurance in England remained...a specialized contract.
Here, in England is an ADJECTIVE serving to describe life insurance.
What TYPE of life insurance?
Life insurance IN ENGLAND.
Conveyed meaning:
A particular TYPE of life insurance -- life insurance in England -- remained a specialized contract.

Hi GMATGuruNY ,

Thank you so much for your explanation.

Just a quick question - is the usage of COMMA+WHO correct in E ?

Please explain.

Many thanks in advance.

Kavin

Needgmat wrote:is the usage of COMMA+WHO correct in E ?

D: clients, typically ship owners, overseas merchants, or professional moneylenders
E: clients, who typically were ship owners, overseas merchants, or professional moneylenders
In E, the usage of COMMA + who is not incorrect.
That said, D conveys the same meaning more concisely, making D better than E.