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The rating system for electronic games is similar to the movie rating system in that it provides consumers with a quick reference so that they can determine if the subject matter and contents are appropriate. This electronic game rating system is not working because it is self regulated and the fines for violating the rating system are nominal. As a result an independent body should oversee the game industry and companies that knowingly violate the rating system should be prohibited from releasing a game for two years.

In the preceding statement, the author claims that even electronic games rating system is smilar to movie rating system but still electronic game rating system is not that efficient and effectively used as movie rating system.For example we generally select movie to view movie based on there rating but when it comes to electronic games we dont bother about its rating.The argument could have been much clearer if it explicitly stated that why electronics rating sytems are not well accepted in industry and why people won't believe on there ratings.Though his claim may well have merit, the author presents a poorly reasoned argument, based on several questionable premises and assumptions, and based solely on the evidence the author offers, we cannot accept his argument as valid.

The primary issue with the author's reasoning lies in his unsubstantiated premises that electronic rating system body is self regulated that why it is not working efficiently.Second, the argument claims that the fees of voilating rating system is very less.This is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrate any correlation between why moview rating system is more efficient and crediable and why electronice games rating sytem is loosing its credebility.However,adding independent bodies for managing effective rating sytem might be overhead indeed movie rating system is also managed by self regulated body. .In fact, it is not at all clear why auther suggested to have greater fines for voilators rather focusing on crediability of electronic game rating system among uses.The author's premises, the basis for his argument, lack any legitimate evidentiary support and render his conclusion unacceptable.

In addition, the author makes several assumptions that remain unproven how independent body will increase increase the believe of generl user in electrnoic games Without convincing answers to these questions, one is left with the impression that the claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.While the author does have several key issues in his argument's premises and assumptions, that is not to say that the entire argument is without base as movie rating system is also independent body but still delivers the quality;as we all takes kids to movie based on rating of movies and never get heated.Instead if we focus on sytem flaws and define the definitions of rating very clearly and focus on improving the process then it will be helpfull to improve the users beleive in electronic games rating.Though there are several issues with the author's reasoning at present, with research and clarification, he could improve his argument significantly.

In sum, the author's illogical argument is based on unsupported premises and unsubstantiated assumptions that render his conclusion invalid about having independent body and increasing fines will improve the quality of electronic games rating system.If the author truly hopes to change his readers' minds on the issue, he would have to largely restructure his argument, fix the flaws in his logic, clearly explicate his assumptions, and provide evidentiary support. Without these things, his poorly reasoned argument will likely convince few people.

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